Date: 30 Jul 2012 20:19 Title: Coda
No...he has to come back! He has to figure out that Jim was lying! This is exactly the problem with these two--they sacrifice too much for each other, when if they'd just let themselves be selfish for half a second, they'd be happy. And yet...they couldn't act any differently and still be themselves. Sigh. That was exquisite and so painful. Well done.
Date: 30 Jul 2012 20:05 Title: al
Wow. That was so painful. It's so hard to see this happening between them, but you make it seem inevitable, and so perfectly in character.
Date: 30 Jul 2012 19:57 Title: Da Capo
This is very poignant and insightful. You have such a grasp on both men's characters. I don't usually go for K/S slash, but this is so much more than that. Thank you.
[Report This]Date: 24 Sep 2009 16:01 Title: Coda
OMG.
Dear Anna,
your story is painfully honest. No fairy tales for your readers.
As always, it´s a delight to discover in your writing those little things that ties the story with written and unwritten ones. AH, DCalC, TLaT. Parts of a long life story, better enjoyed when the reader catchs in them the pieces of the big puzzle, and suddenly, everything makes sense.
As a character study, the story has a world to offer. All the fears that can be find in RL are here, as all the wrong choices.
Water.
Water is always present. Rain droplets falling, a glass emptied without thinking, the ocean. Spock loves the rain and don´t fear deep waters.
A wonderful story from a wonderful story line.
Thanks for sharing.
V.