Date: 18 May 2014 23:13 Title: Melissa Madden
Time passes so fast, and I love the perspective you used here. Kudos, well done. Very emotional, and I was very much along for the ride on this one.
Author's Response:
Thank you! Way more to go ....
Date: 18 May 2014 22:55 Title: Melissa Madden
It's a shame we're limited to 500 words...I'd have liked to see more of Tommy's memories of Melissa. And wven after reading the WFW the other day, mentioning her dementia still stung brutally.
And what a way to start things off. Yikes...
Author's Response:
Thanks - yeah - he could've used more than 500 words, but he's on a really restricted time budget. The whole story takes place in one second of time.
Date: 18 May 2014 22:50 Title: Melissa Madden
Oh, Lord, Jes. You're gonna try to rip my heart out with this set, aren't you? Aren't you? Geez. Great start.
Author's Response:
The end is known, yes. I'm just here to fill in the nanoseconds that remain....
Date: 18 May 2014 22:03 Title: Melissa Madden
Very, very cool idea! I have an idea who some of the other women are, based on the world (and family) you created. It'll be a treat to get his take on the other women who had an impact on his life, just wish it were under different circumstances. So sad to think he'll be gone at the end of this, as opposed to sharing these thoughts and observations with his grandkids, or nieces or nephews on a more upbeat, happy occasion.
Author's Response:
You'll know a few of the names, yes.
Hey, the redshirt gets his due.
Date: 18 May 2014 21:26 Title: Melissa Madden
Very powerful memories conveyed from Thomas. I almost felt like I was there with him as he recalled his mother and his siblings.
Thanks for sharing such an emotional, heartfelt and wonderful piece. :)
Author's Response:
Oh! Thank you so very much!
Date: 18 May 2014 20:20 Title: Melissa Madden
Ouch. Time seems to go by so fast in life, it's nice to think that in the last seconds you can relive the parts you want. Tommy's memories here of his mother are tinged with sadness in a lot of ways -- I get the feeling he wishes she had a life that was still full and thriving, instead of one lost in dementia.
I like the take here and the way that fireball is inching closer. As we get near the end of his life, I expect things are gonna get more potent.
Author's Response:
Indeed! Yeah, his mother's end was not easy for him, and he had Starfleet duty and couldn't be there to care for her, or even see her that much. And when he could, she thought he was Doug. Thank you for reading; he's got a lot to say, and to remember, in the next few nanoseconds.
Date: 18 May 2014 19:18 Title: Melissa Madden
Oh wow! What a great concept. A story told in the moments before death. Gives such a tragic bent to the whole thing. I can't wait to find out who the six other women are. You really managed to portray both the immediacy and tragedy of the moment, but also give us a glimpse into this guy's life in only a few short words... So hugely impressed! Great stuff, jes.
Author's Response:
Oh my gosh! Thank you so much! That means a great deal coming from an author I admire so much.
Date: 18 May 2014 18:31 Title: Melissa Madden
Oh, this is a brilliant idea for a seven-part piece. I'm envious I didn't think of it first. ;-) As a mom, I have to love that even at 73, in his dying moment, the first woman he thinks of is his mother. I'm interested to see who else makes the cut.
Author's Response:
Mom's always the first ....
Thank you so much. This story has been in my head for a good 10 months or so (I'd say 9, but that's a little too pat an answer). He just spoke to me one day and said, "Here, write this."
Uh, okay, Tommy.
Date: 18 May 2014 18:01 Title: Melissa Madden
I sense a series coming from you Jespah, an interesting choice of scenes and well execute as always.
Author's Response:
Definitely a series. Thank you for reading!
Date: 18 May 2014 17:49 Title: Melissa Madden
Another intriguing and fascinating premise for the exploration of the TToT14 ficlet dance. Premises don't stack up to much unless a body pulls of the promise. Here you do with aplomb. Tommy is introduced to us and we get a lot about who he is with his look back to his mother and her history. This should prove very interesting, especially given the names we see listed. There's a lot more in store. However, it is all the more compelling since it's through the eyes of a dying man and we'll also be getting a glimpse backward to your characters and maybe a few spoilers too.
Author's Response:
Most definitely. Tommy's got a lot to say in one quick second.