Date: 21 May 2014 23:24 Title: Chapter 4
This is such a fascinating setting and you really make it come alive.
Author's Response: Why Thank you. Glad that work for you :-)
Date: 21 May 2014 08:49 Title: Chapter 3
Quoth the Doctor..."Run."
Yah, it's going to be insane when I finally get Rafale to this point in the timeline...the Undine are freaking everywhere wrecking house. Great job showing the destruction and the amount of conflict going on.
Author's Response: Thank you TS, glad it feel true to STO for you.
I'm look forward to seeing your Rafale crew versus the Undine in the future.
Date: 21 May 2014 03:47 Title: Chapter 3
This isn't going to end well I feel. Who'll survive? Who'll die?
Author's Response: Thanks for reading trekfan. All wars have casualties, but who is next is indeed the question of the hour.
Date: 21 May 2014 02:20 Title: Chapter 3
Wow. Things are getting worse and worse, tactically speaking. Hope they can turn the battle around. Looking forward to seeing what comes next.
Author's Response: Cheers Gatekeeper. I hope you enjoy the next instalment.
Date: 21 May 2014 02:17 Title: Chapter 2
You have quite the battle going on here. I like the idea of being able to hide the two older vessels in a sort of sensor blind spot, but I hate that she needs their help and is having to call them out of the shadows. Hate she's losing the battle, too. Nice job building tension.
Author's Response: Thank you Gatekeeper.
Date: 21 May 2014 02:17 Title: Chapter 3
Oh gosh oh gosh - frying pan to the fire! Can't wait for tomorrow, to see what happens!
Author's Response: Glad you're enjoying the ride. i hope you enjoy day four.
Date: 21 May 2014 01:59 Title: Chapter 3
The battle continues ...
Author's Response: Indeed :-)
Date: 21 May 2014 01:30 Title: Chapter 3
Deadly tension and a change of carnage in this scene but the stakes are inching higher all the time. Great job.
Author's Response: Thank you MF.
Date: 21 May 2014 01:30 Title: Chapter 3
Wow intense scene you got here FalseBill. I anxiously await your next installment for Day 4.
So, what happens next?
Author's Response: Thank you Zeusfluff.
Day four might surprise you.
Date: 20 May 2014 16:30 Title: Chapter 2
Yikes! Quite a battle playing out here. I'll never get used to calling them the Undine; I guess it's the Borg in me. They'll always be Species 8472 to me. <3 (Yeah, I typed a heart. I have a soft spot for anything VOY.)
Author's Response: I fully understand I still think of them as Species 8472, but then so does Admiral Tuvok in STO. Yay VOY!
Date: 20 May 2014 14:00 Title: Chapter 2
Ack!
Things are not looking good for our heroes. I liked the tactic of hiding the other ships, but now we're at a kitchen sink phase of the battle, where everything is being hurled at the enemy.
Can't wait to see what happens tomorrow!
Author's Response: Thank you.
Date: 20 May 2014 13:28 Title: Chapter 2
Intense! You did a good job of portraying the battle and the stress your characters were under. There were still a few nitpicks, but overall the story worked well. Nicely done!
Author's Response: Thanks CS.
Date: 20 May 2014 08:04 Title: Chapter 2
Definitely ramping up. I can imagine the damaged station looking a lot like the damaged ESD in the recent episode.
Author's Response: Thanks for reading.
Yes ganges is looking a lot like ESD in that recent STO episode.
Date: 20 May 2014 07:49 Title: Chapter 2
Eek dramatic events. You depict the chaos and carnage of the battle really we'll. sounds bad for all concerned and very grim. Will there be a day three at this rate?
Author's Response: O they be a day three, but yes things aren't going to get any easier just yet for our heroes.
Date: 19 May 2014 20:56 Title: Chapter 1
Relentless enemy and determinedly so. Good work FB.
Author's Response: Thanks Mac, Glad you like it.
Date: 19 May 2014 04:50 Title: Chapter 1
I experienced dawning comprehension with this story. I now totally get the backstory for putting Emmylou in a Galor! That's so cool! I didn't know you played STO, Bill! This is a great tie in to Season 9.
Author's Response: Glad you like this tie-in to Season 9.
Date: 19 May 2014 03:24 Title: Chapter 1
Nice, intense beginning. Looking forward to seeing where this goes.
Author's Response: Thank you, hope you like the next part.
Date: 19 May 2014 01:26 Title: Chapter 1
Good intense scene you've got going. I hope you expand on this, I'd like to see where you go with it.
Thanks for sharing this little ficlet.
Author's Response: Thank you.
Date: 18 May 2014 23:23 Title: Chapter 1
Nice! I like the use of the Undine and you did a good job of loading the tension. Look forward to seeing where this goes.
Author's Response: Thank you.
Date: 18 May 2014 23:16 Title: Chapter 1
STO I haven't really played since it first came out. You pack quite a punch in such a short word count. Good tension here.
Author's Response: Thank you Mick, glad the opener worked for you.
Date: 18 May 2014 22:57 Title: Chapter 1
Oh the Undine invasions...
The STO universe certainly got thrown into chaos a few weeks ago. I'll be neat to explore this in Rafale later on, but this looks like it'll be a great way to introduce the rest of this community to this new facet of the universe we play in. Looking forward to seeing where you take this!
Author's Response: I hope I can deliver, but for now you've got me looking forward to your future Rafale story.
Thank you.
Date: 18 May 2014 22:34 Title: Chapter 1
Looks like a really decent start, Bill. Nothing like a battle scene to kick things off, right?
Author's Response: I'm glad you like the start, here hoping I can maintain or lift the standard for the whole week.
Date: 18 May 2014 21:43 Title: Chapter 1
Tense, knuckle-biting action. Can't wait to see what happens next.
PS Feel free to send me these for betas - they're short and I should be able to get them done in time for you to post them. ;-)
Author's Response: Thank you LBD, Your Beta services would be most appreciated.
Date: 18 May 2014 21:11 Title: Chapter 1
Ai yi yi bad things are afoot for our heroes!! Can't wait to see how it all plays out ....
Author's Response: I'll try to ensure it plays out in a way to maintain your interest.
Date: 18 May 2014 20:45 Title: Chapter 1
Tense scene. Facing down a planet killer sounds about as nice as facing down an enraged bull. I don't envy these guys but you do a good job at capturing the hectic feelings.
Author's Response: Thanks trekfan