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Reviewer: zeusfluff Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 May 2014 22:57 Title: Chapter 6

Wait, what? Senezqu willingly sacrificed himself? Hmm.

Can't wait to see where you take us in Day 7.

Author's Response: Thanks.

Reviewer: Mackenzie Calhoun Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 May 2014 22:31 Title: Chapter 6

nor the battle or the strong. Tough stuff, nice piece.

Author's Response: Thanks again Mackenzie for reading.

Reviewer: Miranda Fave Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 May 2014 22:07 Title: Chapter 6

“Commander Senezqu, all I’ve got on me is an unconscious Admiral, a pack of mints and a razor sharp wit,” answered Reqknor.


LMAO! Loved this line. You're hired Mr Reqknor. Enjoyed this immensely. Undine infiltration and the stakes get higher and direr. One ficlet left. I don't like their chances.



Author's Response: Glad that line worked so much for you MF. Here hoping the finale doesn't disappoint tomorrow.

Reviewer: Gatekeeper Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 May 2014 06:33 Title: Chapter 1

I had so hoped things were finally getting better for the Federation, but it isn't to be, yet. Here's hoping they can get all their ships back in the game, and pull this one out for the Federation. Nice job.

Author's Response: Fingers cross Gatekeeper for our Heroes. Thanks for reading and reviewing.

Reviewer: Lil black dog Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 May 2014 05:14 Title: Chapter 5

Just when it looked like things were turning around for our heroes.  Guess we'll just have to wait till tomorrow to see how things unfold. ;-)



Author's Response: Indeed here hoping you enjoy the ending.

Reviewer: Lil black dog Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 May 2014 05:10 Title: Chapter 4

And the question remains - can they find a way to destroy the Undine 'hatchery' before being totally obliterated themselves?



Author's Response: Indeed but I think the Romulans will come good somehow. Thanks.

Reviewer: Lil black dog Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 May 2014 05:08 Title: Chapter 3

Things are heating up - or falling apart - in the worst way imaginable.  Here's hoping our heroes find some solution, and are able to halt the carnage.



Author's Response: Well they be worthy of the name Heroes if they do :)

Reviewer: MIck Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 May 2014 02:12 Title: Chapter 5

The plot is getting thicker.  It'll be interesting to see how you wrap this up.  Good job here.



Author's Response: Thanks Mick.

Reviewer: RogueJawa Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 May 2014 01:39 Title: Chapter 4

Awesome tie-in, FaleBill. Is this based off of Viscous Cycle or the last episode of the Borg arc that they redid? I loved that episode, but I haven't had a chance to play Viscous Cycle yet. Either way, from what I know of Viscous Cycle, this is an awesome novelization of what's going on in-game.

Author's Response: :) Glad you feel this is an"Awesome novelization". Thanks for your kind words.

Reviewer: Miranda Fave Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 May 2014 00:23 Title: Chapter 5

Compelling dire odds. Liking the massive scale of the depiction. These brief snatches give quite a view into the larger picture and how badly things fare. How will it all end?



Author's Response: I'm glad you enjoying this little snatches of the bigger picture, It's not going well for Starfleet but you have to read onto find out how it ends.

Reviewer: M C Pehrson Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 May 2014 23:51 Title: Chapter 2

More and more action. It's fun writing that stuff, isn't it?



Author's Response: O yes it's fun ;)

Reviewer: M C Pehrson Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 May 2014 23:49 Title: Chapter 1

That dance has a lot of action! Nice going.



Author's Response: Thank you.

Reviewer: CaptainSarine Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 May 2014 23:27 Title: Chapter 5

Things are getting dark, but your crews are doing well to hold things together. Good job with the battle description, never an easy thing to do. Look forward to seeing how things wrap up.

Author's Response: Thank you CS, I hope the future ending is to your liking.

Reviewer: Mackenzie Calhoun Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 May 2014 22:16 Title: Chapter 5

Come on Starfleet, pull your finger out. I'm sure they will soon

Author's Response: Well if they don't soon, they will be dead.

Reviewer: Mackenzie Calhoun Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 May 2014 22:14 Title: Chapter 4

A bit of a smile. Almost like the Romulans are the calvary riding to the rescue. Cry havoc.

Author's Response: Any bit of a smile is good and the Romulans are causing havoc, Cheers for reading.

Reviewer: Mackenzie Calhoun Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 May 2014 22:13 Title: Chapter 3

A real sense of backs to the wall. Seems some Blitz spirit is needed.

Author's Response: Yes the blitz spirit and a few heavy weapons is needed :)

Reviewer: Mackenzie Calhoun Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 May 2014 22:11 Title: Chapter 2

If Spock were here he'd say the situation was grim. Doesn't look like it's getting better alas. Onwards to the next part FB :)

Author's Response: Seems a Logical response but thanks for reading.

Reviewer: jespah Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 May 2014 20:27 Title: Chapter 5

It certainly does pour. Can you wrap 'em up in 2 days????



Author's Response: I hope so Jespah.

Reviewer: kes7 Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 May 2014 03:57 Title: Chapter 4

The baby ships are interesting.  This continues to be a cool look at a universe I'm not terribly familiar with.



Author's Response: Glad you're enjoying the view & the story.

Reviewer: MIck Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 May 2014 03:28 Title: Chapter 4

Beware of those pesky Romulans.  Good character shift here to show a different perspective.



Author's Response: Cheers Mick

Reviewer: zeusfluff Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 May 2014 01:59 Title: Chapter 4

Forgive me, I read this earlier, but I got distracted. So here's my review.

Ooh. Fluidic space huh? Torla destroyed the enemy facility completely? Some tense stuff going on here.

Cannot wait to see where you go for Day 5.

Author's Response: Many Thanks.

Reviewer: Gatekeeper Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 May 2014 00:45 Title: Chapter 4

I like the shift here. I like the idea of bio-ships, which grow in the nesting sacs attached to other ships. That's an interesting idea. Nice job with this story, FB.

Author's Response: Again Thank you for reading and your feedback.

Reviewer: Miranda Fave Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 May 2014 00:17 Title: Chapter 4

Nice switch in story perspective. Now we take the fight to the Undine. Again, a piece that adds to the greater story you are telling FB. Good job.



Author's Response: Again thank you MF, glad the story is holding together for you.

Reviewer: trekfan Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 May 2014 23:28 Title: Chapter 4

And now the Romulans enter the picture. Let's hope they're able to do some good.



Author's Response: I think the Romulans will try to do some good.

Reviewer: CaptainSarine Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 May 2014 23:24 Title: Chapter 4

I love the idea of the coral life structures - is that your invention or is it from STO? I like the character of Torla, a true Romulan, willing to put her own life after her service, and I like the idea of a Romulan Republic. She seems like an interesting character. Good job!

Author's Response: I can't take credit for the Coral structures that was STO idea. Glad you like Torla she is a fun Romulan to write for.

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