Date: 24 May 2014 21:14 Title: Chapter 7
Chilling ending, I loved it. Very satisfying conclusion.
Date: 24 May 2014 21:13 Title: Chapter 6
Nice break in the action here. I'm liking Rhys even more now.
Date: 24 May 2014 20:35 Title: Chapter 7
Holy crap! Dun-dun-dunnn, indeed! Didn't see that coming at all, but I did wonder if the Undine would somehow try to disrupt the summit or carry out additional terrorists acts - after all, how could they resist with so many of their enemies in one place. This e=bears continuing, pretty please? :)
Date: 24 May 2014 19:50 Title: Chapter 7
Called it. lol
Awesome story, bud! You did a great job introducing these very recent events in the setting we share to the community, and you had the NPCs perfect too. Be interested in seeing more of your Pathfinder series in the future! Well done!
Date: 24 May 2014 19:43 Title: Chapter 5
Boom! Lay it on them, Rhys!
Date: 24 May 2014 19:41 Title: Chapter 4
I still hate Skyl. Great job with him. For those who don't play STO, RJ has Skyl down perfect!
And of course the Deferi is Undine. It's always the quiet ones...
Date: 24 May 2014 18:14 Title: Chapter 7
Summits never go smoothly and a real sense of it here. Ominous final line. A nice piece.
Date: 24 May 2014 17:32 Title: Chapter 7
Well played. What kind of a paranoid mood must be permeating the galaxy with these guys on the loose? It calls back to the TNG episode "Conspiracy," only those guys were much more obvious about it what with their worm eating and all that. And those things were much easier to kill.
Well-written stuff.
Date: 24 May 2014 16:40 Title: Chapter 7
Oh my goodness! The transporter chief, really? And poor Tanaka has no idea. That last line was chilling. Nice job!
I would love to see this expanded, to know what happens at the conference and if the Undine ultimately win, or if the Federation pulls out an ace in the hole.
Date: 24 May 2014 16:38 Title: Chapter 6
I like that this section gives us something of a break in the action, so that we can get a feel for the characters and how they are processing what has happened so far.
Date: 24 May 2014 16:01 Title: Chapter 7
There's that awful line again; it remains chilling. This is a great storyline and I hope you'll continue it.
Date: 24 May 2014 14:33 Title: Chapter 7
Ooh, chilling. So Pearson is Undine? Or did I misunderstand the implication? You have a great ear for dialogue, which has been true throughout and was again evident here. I really enjoyed this series and Pathfinder will definitely be going on my to read list! :)
Date: 24 May 2014 13:49 Title: Chapter 7
Oh my GAWD! I loved that. What a terrific ender. What a reveal. I mean, I thought the charming old lady was going to impart some sage advice to Tanaka. Yet all along she's a wolf in sheep's clothing. That's brilliant. Loved it.
Date: 24 May 2014 13:00 Title: Chapter 7
Those Undine get everywhere don't they?
Interesting choice of ending a well handle set of short stories.
Congratulations on completing your TTOT 2014 tale.
Date: 24 May 2014 11:03 Title: Chapter 7
OH! OH! That was a killer ending. Wow. I do really hope you're planning on exploring this at some point down the road. Very well done, the whole set.
Date: 24 May 2014 11:00 Title: Chapter 6
Very lovely bit of introspection here, especially in the last line. It's nice to see some self-awareness, there, in L'Gran and in what can perhaps be done about lingering prejudice.
Date: 24 May 2014 10:58 Title: Chapter 5
Well, that definitely explains it! What an entirely creepy setup for a possible all out invasion, though. It reeks of things yet to come, doesn't it? And here we have two more chapters to see.
Date: 24 May 2014 10:57 Title: Chapter 4
Why am I not shocked that one turned out to be trouble? Nice gambit, and well played, setting them at each others' throats like that. But what's the ulterior motive?
Date: 24 May 2014 08:56 Title: Chapter 7
Oh, what an ending. I hope you turn this into a series. I really would like to know how all this turns out if it were continued...
Thanks for sharing this.
Date: 24 May 2014 08:35 Title: Chapter 7
Yikes, the transporter chief? The whole time? Man, that's a tough one. Poor Tanaka, has no idea and probably won't anytime soon. This has been a fun tale.
Date: 24 May 2014 02:50 Title: Chapter 1
The calm after the storm, but I get the feeling that neither Rhys nor L'Gran can relax, just in case any more flashpoints burst into a flame that needs to be extinguished.
I like the relaxed interplay between them. Shows they've been together a while and know each other well. I also like how, at the end, L'Gran realizes that he has issues of his own that need tending to.
Date: 24 May 2014 02:28 Title: Chapter 6
I will never get why the Klingons and the Federation are still fighting after all this time. Nice character work here.
Date: 24 May 2014 01:23 Title: Chapter 6
Points to Rhys for the Chai Latte and a hot bath. That's a combo I can get behind. The camraderie between the two here is well done and warming. Let's hope everyone will realize that they're stronger together than apart.
Author's Response: Thanks trekfan! I appreciate that. I really enjoy writing them together.
Date: 24 May 2014 01:19 Title: Chapter 5
Well, that proves the point in spades, doesn't it? The weak shall perish. If the rest of the powers don't get their act together, the Undine will be right.
Date: 23 May 2014 23:34 Title: Chapter 6
Nice aftermath scene, you do a good job of building your pathfinder world and showing some of the politics.
Author's Response: Thanks!