Date: 27 Aug 2013 10:52 Title: The Battle of Bajor
This is not a happy universe you operate in.
Date: 26 May 2013 02:37 Title: The Battle of Bajor
Absolutely brilliant. You could feel her indecision, her disbelief, not only of the fact that Defiant was lost, but that she was the ranking officer left--thrust into a position she clearly didn't feel she was ready for. And all of it playing out to the soft undercurrent of Jadzia's sorrow. It reminded me of those bits in film (Saving Private Ryan especially) when the action goes to slow-motion and the sound cuts out, lending that visceral feel of confusion. You captured that beautifully.
Date: 26 May 2013 01:36 Title: The Battle of Bajor
The last order given on a very bad day. Damn.
Date: 23 May 2013 03:42 Title: The Battle of Bajor
Well, she made her decision, and seems to be suffering for it. This is such a fascinating look back at the background of your story universe. I mean, I knew that this was an AU where the Dominion won, but I had never really thought about what that looked like for the people we "know" who fought in it. This look at the horror is sad, but really compelling.
Date: 22 May 2013 01:37 Title: The Battle of Bajor
Seems the weight of command forces upon Ezri so. When it goes wrong it goes wrong by far.
Date: 22 May 2013 00:45 Title: The Battle of Bajor
Oh man. Worf goes down. Kira goes down. Sisko keels over (great word choice there, really enjoyed that). The scene was set wonderfully and Ezri's thoughts about Worf, about how Jadzia would have handled it, were quite humbling. I never got the sense in DS9 she ever felt guilty about things but here that feeling is quite genuine.
It was nice to see Nog, too, and the loss of the Defiant is, as always, a sad affair. Now ... where does Ezri go from here? What happens next?
Can't wait for more.
Date: 22 May 2013 00:40 Title: The Battle of Bajor
Damn. So much in so short a space. It really makes it all very stark. Such a huge thing to try and assimilate and understand. For Ezri and for the reader to take in so many upheavels. Real punch to the gut type stuff. Would love to see an expansionof this beyond the ficlet of course to get the real grit and gore and sense of palpable loss through.
Date: 22 May 2013 00:13 Title: The Battle of Bajor
I got chills with this one; not to mention the heartache. Her struggle pulls in all directions, and I love what you've done with it.
Date: 22 May 2013 00:11 Title: The Battle of Bajor
Frying pan, meet fire.
Oh, I can feel her confusion and her feeling like maybe she can't do this.
Well done.
Date: 22 May 2013 00:10 Title: The Battle of Bajor
This is so very well handled. I could feel Ezri's shock; it was like that feeling where you're underwater, and everything's muffled and distorted. Then it's like it snaps back into place when she has to give the order.
Talk about a gut wrenching piece. Everything about it was paced perfectly; each word landed exactly where it should, and how it should. Truly brilliant work, no kidding.