Date: 18 Jul 2014 08:14 Title: Volume One - Chapter 1
Ba'el Sarine is having some disturbing nightmares. I could feel like I was there with him as he awakens from his nightmare. I couldn’t imagine what it might have been like to live through the Occupation. I saw through his eyes as he tries to shake the nightmare from himself. Sounds like he isn’t too enthusiastic about meeting up with Kovat. Now you’ve got my interest piqued. I want to know what Kovat wants from Captain Sarine. Good start to this story. I’ll continue reading to see where you take this. Thanks for sharing this and keep writing.
Date: 22 Oct 2013 08:36 Title: Volume One - Chapter 1
It can be hard to get readers into a reasonably complex AU without relying on huge amounts of exposition, and I think you did a good job of not falling into that trap. We get information in chunks here and there--enough so we're not lost and stay interested, but not so much as to get bored and wonder when something's going to happen. In fact the action keeps on coming at a nice clip that makes this a consistent read, something else that's tricky in an establishment piece like this.
I like how Sarine's presented to us almost as a sort of mystery man; it makes him a lead you want to scrutinize and consider instead of just write off as The Good Guy Leading Us. This helps keep things unpredictable.
Related to this, I like that we don't get all the answers, to him or to numerous other things. It leaves more for the future and lets all those possibilities create an atmosphere that's not rigid or defined.
I basically have nothing but sympathy for Kalara. Not sure if that was intended but there you are. This is not to say I agree with how she acted towards Sarine, but I also get where she's coming from and the kind of position she's now in.
Date: 01 Jun 2013 07:59 Title: Volume One - Chapter 1
This is an interesting start. I'm already intrigued by Ba'el - a man who's still having nightmares about the Incident even though he's been living on Earth, apparently out of Starfleet, for at least three months.
Your style had a nice flow and cadence to it, and the description of the Mediterranean as part and parcel of the view out of the window practically had me smelling the salt air, feeling the sea breeze ruffling my hair.
And what of Kovat? That the two have a history is obvious, but Ba'el seems more eager to forget it and leave the past behind that Kovat. I'm with Ba'el - I smell an ulterior motive behind the visit as well. I have no doubt that Ba'el won't like it, either, but I get the distinct impression that he's a man of honor, and won't shirk doing what needs to be done, even if that duty is pressed upon him.
Date: 28 May 2013 18:17 Title: Volume One - Chapter 1
Just when I think I'm out ... they pull me ... back in!
So, Ba'El (a part-Vulcan?) is retired, or thinks he is, but now he's needed for ... something. This Laurentine Hegemony does not seem to be up to any good.
Author's Response: Hi jespah! Welcome to the wild world of Restoration! Thanks for the comment, hope you continue on past the first chapter. Ba'el is actually part-Romulan, though at this point I was leaving it a little vague. And no, the Hegemony does not have puppy dogs on the brain. :)
Date: 08 Dec 2009 14:35 Title: Volume One - Chapter 1
Ok so finally getting around to starting this. An interesting premise that acts as a great hook into the story on its own merit. However, the hinted at shared and troubled history between this pair is a further hook. Just what have they gone through and what lengths did they go to. One is left wondering what to make of this new Federation/Starfleet. Hints at an occupation; Andor no longer being part of the Federation and Starfleet's reluctance to help; refugee committees; you hint at a lot of things that have gone wrong and far from perfect in this new timeline. Should promise many interesting things.
Author's Response: Hey! So glad you're reading this, I so hope you will enjoy it. I really tried to show as quickly as possible that this was not the Federation we know, whether that be through the problems with the machinery to show this is far from the paradise Earth we have seen in the past, the lack of cohesion in the Federation and other more obvious things like Andor no longer being part of the Federation. Look forward to reading your further comments
Date: 03 Sep 2009 23:43 Title: Volume One - Chapter 1
Interesting beginning! You've got a post-Dominion occupied Alpha Quadrant and a mysterious man trying to make a quiet life for himself on Earth with Starfleet trying to (or so it sounds) pull him back into the fold.
I'm looking forward to more.
Date: 03 Sep 2009 23:05 Title: Volume One - Chapter 1
I've been following this on TrekBBS and I love it so much! I can't wait to find out what happens next in this upside-down galaxy you've created.