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Date: 02 Jul 2023 11:52 Title: Epilogue

And a nice epilogue for what could be a great standalone story or part of a series of interrelated stories - either with Trujillo or involving captains from several different eras of the Federation. You could follow a time agent hopping through eras chasing the Sphere Builders...

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Date: 02 Jul 2023 11:48 Title: Chapter 14

Trujillo snorted. “Can I have a patch? I presume there’s a patch.”

Of course there's a patch. Once you attach it to your epaulet, it folds spacetime around itself and becomes effectively cloaked...

I love the spacetime paradox angle - future antagonists wil be reviewing current fleet movements... I also like the character of the Shpere Busters - fairly open for temporal agents.

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Date: 02 Jul 2023 11:38 Title: Chapter 13

As always, Glal is a breath of fresh air. I particularly liked Saavik in this scene when she drops the mask a little and explains squadron level command. 

Really great character arc and development for Trujillo with Saavik in an unanticipated mentoring role.

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Date: 17 Jun 2023 21:45 Title: Chapter 12

I'm appreciating the sentiment SF officers are offering to a biologically very different antagno. Really good action sequence and a great excuse to use the word "discombobulate" - which should be celebrated whenever it arises.

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Date: 17 Jun 2023 21:26 Title: Chapter 11

I suppose I should get on with commenting on these archived stories before this part of AA becomes frozen. This is one of those transitional scenes, laying down the theory for the attack to come. 

Nice character moment for Garrett in her hesitancy to speak out of turn.

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Date: 11 Jun 2023 01:20 Title: Chapter 10

I really appeciate the call-back to a controversial story line for the STE series, which was actually my favorite and partcularly because of the expanse stories that allowed Scott Bakula to go where no franchise lead had gone before - seriously dark. 

Of course the focus on Glal in this installment makes it one of my favorites in either this or the Gibraltar series. Really well done humor and character highlights. I just caught the reference to "thumbs-up" being Glal's 2nd favorite of human gestures. I could just imagine him at the apex of a desperate battle giving the other with both hands and a throaty invective.

Superb action installment - Thanks!! rbs

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Date: 04 Jun 2023 20:17 Title: Chapter 9

I really enjoy the in-depth exploration of the Marshall/Trujillo relationship and getting inside Marshall's head via D'Vorr.

Command level officers, of a necessity, have big egos and ambitions. They're going to spark on occasion. It's also an interesting reflection on Saavik that no one seems to completely trust her. It almost certainly has to be a dynamic Saavik is aware of and may actually cultivate in order to keep her officers on their toes.

Thanks!! rbs



Author's Response:

Thank you for the review! Yes, Saavik is an interesting sort, one who plays Starfleet Command's political game deftly, as Markopoulos discovered to his detriment.

Reviewer: Robert Bruce Scott Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 26 May 2023 22:09 Title: Chapter 8

Really superb technobabble in this scene - particularly from the (very interesting to begin with) chief engineer. The discussion about subspace is very well conceived.

I also like the political maneuvering between Trujillo and Marshall. Big egos carefully negotiating around each other. Interesitng that Marshall is put off by Trujillo's determination to hear the other captains out - particularly as he is requiring her to hear him out...

Great closing line.. Thanks!! rbs

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Date: 23 May 2023 00:03 Title: Chapter 7

Every line from Glal is dripping with his enormous personality - easily my favorite of your characters (and probably a fan favorite among your other readers as well.) Not sure if you intended the Hierynmus Bosch reference, but I read it as deliberate.

Glal alone is more than enough reason for a second reading. But I really appreciate the continuation of a very highly criticized STE storyline - one that I liked because it really gave rise to "dark Archer," which allowed Bakula to really stretch and strut a little.

Thanks!! rbs

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Date: 21 May 2023 10:27 Title: Chapter 6

On second read, I'm enjoying the writing of Helvia more, particularly the metaphoric descriptions. Also appreciating that Trujillo, instead of giving orders to Marshall, asks what his plan is.

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Date: 16 May 2023 01:34 Title: Chapter 5

I think I picked up on Helvia coming from the planet of the Romans from the original series on my first read through - even before the reference to the children of the sun. Interesitng character design. 

I recall really liking the careful dance between Trujillo and Marshall. As I recall, Marshall was a character you borrowed from anther UT writer?

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Date: 13 May 2023 15:04 Title: Chapter 4

“Well, it wouldn’t be your wedding if it didn’t spark a shooting war, would it?”

Great line. I think I mentioned before that line reminds me of GOT: It's not a Dothraki wedding until at least one dead body hits the floor... Really liking the world-building with the description of the CCC. Also enjoying Saavik's rather imperial entrance.

Of course Glal's recall to duty is accompanied by the tremendous depth of personality you've given that character. 

The list of ships is both useful and amusing - particualrly the Niels Bohr and having an Okinawa-class ship named after a city in Okinawa.

Thanks!! rbs

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Date: 06 May 2023 02:15 Title: Chapter 3

Really a nice contrast between Trujillo's newfound ability to show feelings and Garrett's inability to deal with hers. It's surprising what jumps out on a second read - particularly Glal's tchotchkes and the ruminations it leads to.

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Date: 04 May 2023 04:08 Title: Chapter 2

I appreciate the racial details about Davula's striping (or lack thereof) as well as the details about her ridge. There is a story about the original series makeup artists and producers panicking because there was an inconsistency in the makeup applied to a few klingons, resulting in color variations and other details. They couldn't afford to change it, so they ran with it and hoped no one would notice. Of course the fans did notice and inundated the producers with letters praising them for creating racial variations within the klingon population.

Second rise out of "Yes sir, Nandi, sir..." fun gag. And a few fun details that kind of slid by me the last time - the Montgomery Scott Award for miracles and Davula's harrowing journey connected a bit more this time.

Thanks!! rbs



Author's Response:

I'm glad you're discovering new aspects of the story upon your second reading! Thanks for giving it another look.

Reviewer: Robert Bruce Scott Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 03 May 2023 01:52 Title: Chapter 1

Just caught the reference to adjusting the warp scale - which I've found is a common reason given for Captain Picard's casual order to take the U.S.S. Pasteur to Warp 13 in the final episode of STNG. 

Having Trujillo getting married humanizes her. Also interesting that she identifies herself as a soldier - restless in times of peace. 

Thanks!! rbs

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