[Report This]Date: 23 Jul 2020 13:48 Title: Part 2
Superb little story and in the best Trek tradition of stories like Lower Decks and stories about Worf getting used to being a Commander on DS9.
A very nice and unexpected twist on the Kobasyahi Maru. I finished writing STH in March, but this story (and the Horizon Protocol) give me a few ideas of some stories I can add to take place between Episodes 26 and 27 to develop Napoleon's leadership profile.
Thanks for the inspiration!! rbs
Author's Response: Glad you enjoyed this one and that it's giving you ideas for more Hunter. I started writing the lower decks stories because I always though the concept was fun and I really liked the freedom it provides while staying in my little corner of the universe. Very eager to see what they are doing with the Lower Decks animated show. It looks like that could be a lot of fun.
Date: 17 Sep 2013 11:49 Title: Part 2
I love this story, it is short and well structured. I always loved the lower decks episode from TNG, and similar episodes on VOY... it's usually always about the high ranking seniors, but its the crew on the lower decks that keep a ship together! Nice!
Author's Response: Thank you, glad you liked it.
Date: 07 Sep 2013 20:40 Title: Part 2
*applause*
Nicely done. The KM scenario was well-delivered, and the reader gets a very good sense of being there. The characters come across well and as individuals and not as types.
Author's Response: *bows graciously* Glad you enjoyed it. One of the most important things in writing a story tends to be that the characters come across as believable. Good to know I achieved that.
Date: 18 Jul 2013 15:44 Title: Part 2
A nice, satisfying conclusion, and a realistic look into the gritty, sometimes difficult and constantly busy life of a junior officer.
I was glad to see her step up here and take ownership of her rank and position, especially with regard to Dinkins and her confidence at the helm of Eagle.
Her talk with Star did make me squirm a little, though. Star telling her that the evasive maneuver Srena performed in the asteroid belt got Tazla in trouble with the captain just seemed a little off, as if the first officer was throwing the junior officer under the bus. On the other hand we weren't privy to the conversation between the CO and XO in the ready room after the incident. I would hope Star explained to Owens that the maneuver had been necessary in order to avoid damaging Eagle and the cargo it had in tow. If you ask me, Srena performed in an exemplary fashion under extremely difficult circumstances and deserved to have her actions defended, not condemned by the XO.
I did like the aspect of the conversation in which Star pointed out her reasons for riding Srena so hard, though, and for telling the ensign that she had a promising future if she was willing to work for it. Military personnel can never afford to get complacent, in peacetime or wartime. That aspect came through loud and clear.
All in all, a well-written, enjoyable read. :D
Author's Response: Thank you very much, I'm very glad you liked the story. As for the scene that made you squirm, my interpretation there is that Star was merely observing how Srena would react to her telling her about her blaming her for getting into trouble with the captain. I don't believe she is truly holding this against her as, quite rightly, that couldn't and shouldn't have been Srena's concern. After all, following that, the commander quickly explains the real reason for her trepidation in a seemingly uncharacteristically vulnerable and honest moment.
Date: 17 Jul 2013 02:27 Title: Part 2
Very nice fakeout with the holodeck sumulation. You totally had me convinced. I love how she stood up for herself in the Mess, too. I love that she pulled off an excellent piece of flying and came to an understanding with Star. Over all, this was just a terrific Day in the Life tale with an engaging cast and a neat look at shipboard operations. And then the loop back at the end.
Seriously, CeJay, you did a great job with this one.
Author's Response: Holodeck trickery. It's a Trek stable but an irresistible one. Glad it had you going. Again many thanks for reading and reviewing.