[Report This]Date: 06 Aug 2011 15:14 Title: Of Wives, Apartments and Monsters...
Ow, this is fab.
And I'll tell you why (if you don't mind).
The excitement at being first married is truly wonderful and palpable. You realize - God, this guy's in love! Totally! It is very believable. And the effort to get a place, make it just so, etc. (I recently went with my parents to look at an apartment for them, and this story reminded me of that). The shriek, the bug, etc. - fantastic.
My husband says, one of his jobs is to kill the big bugs. So Gil Karama joins a proud tradition of bug-killing guys (let a bat in and we can really see him in action).
Also the "yes, dear" part. It's funny, it's very true and it's just what people do, it's how you compromise as a couple.
Delightful! I don't give out a lot of 10s but this story is one of them.
Author's Response:
I'm glad you liked it :)
I'm also happy that Gil Kamara's feelings seem real and natural, as being a newly wed is pure theory for me ;) Now, as for apartment hunting--I have some personal experience, including ol'rot-like monsters.
Thanks for reading :)
Date: 30 Mar 2011 00:12 Title: Of Wives, Apartments and Monsters...
the narrative simply bounces along, it reads sublimely. Decent story
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading :)
Date: 23 Mar 2011 00:56 Title: Of Wives, Apartments and Monsters...
Quite an amusing tale of cross-cultural marriage. Everything seems to be going well with moving into the new apartment; until an insect is the deal-breaker. Quite an ironic twist with the newlyweds belly-aching over minor cultural and linguistic idiosyncrasies.
Author's Response:
Giant insects seem to carry more weight than anything else ;)
Thanks for reading.
Date: 18 Mar 2011 03:56 Title: Of Wives, Apartments and Monsters...
Oh that was just fabulous! Not only did it showcase a particularly strong, inherent human phobia, but it indicated the marked difference in cultures, and how each responds to certain external stimuli.
Very nicely done. The love between the newlyweds was expressed very well, again each celebrating the cultural and physical differences of their spouse, and how those differences made each so dear to the other.
A wonderful read that rang so true - thank you for sharing it.
Author's Response:
I thought that this particular phobia could be an interesting thing on a planet with a hot climate; observing our own planet and how bugs get bigger the warmer the climate zone...well, it just asked to be written ;)
Thank you for reading and the review, I'm glad you liked it :)
Date: 17 Mar 2011 16:35 Title: Of Wives, Apartments and Monsters...
You candidly go about the telling of a warm, inviting, day-in-the-life story that depicts an experience every new couple will have, and something every couple will always remember – the finding of their first shared home. What they eventually will decide upon, and how they go about that process, will say much about their future lives together. “Charming” has already been used to describe it, and I’m sure I can’t do better than that.
Probably the most outstanding feature of your story for me is how you casually draw upon a surprisingly rich and deep Cardassian cultural backstory that includes hints of extensive fleshing out of native language, anatomy, botany and more. Amazingly thought out detail seems to jump out at nearly every turn, and it was that detail that helped you nail the challenge theme so handily.
You mentioned Federation Standard in your story, which is a term I recognize from a recent story by Nerys Ghemor. Could it be that many of your stories, and hers, are built upon a common fanon-verse? If so, have your considered preparing a reader’s guide, a guide to your Cardassian culture, or something similar? It might make an excellent publication for Ad Astra, and other sites where you publish.
Author's Response:
I started creating Cardassian culture for my universe a few months ago, with my first story, so there is a lot of details that I had ready for use in this story. I can't take all the credit, though, because I needed my beta-reader to point to some places that were "too Earth-y" to do it right.
"Federation Standard" is a term used in Treklit; I'm not sure if English was ever called that in the show, but it is in the literature. Nerys Ghemor and I work in completely different fanfic uniserves, so our Cardassias are different. You can find some of her essays here on AdAstra. I wrote some articles too, but they contain basic knowledge of my Cardassia, not that much cultural background (they are available on my website--the link in my profile).
Nerys Ghemor and I co-wrote a story, so you can see our different universes meeting. The story is available here, on AdAstra, if you'd like to read it.
Thank you for reading :)
Date: 14 Mar 2011 22:28 Title: Of Wives, Apartments and Monsters...
Aw. That was adorable. The sweetness of the husband's love for his wife just shone through. A thoroughly charming and heartwarming tale. Excellent.
Author's Response:
I'm glad you like it.Yes, Karama is very much in love with his wife.
Thanks for reading :)
Date: 14 Mar 2011 04:05 Title: Of Wives, Apartments and Monsters...
YAY! I'm so glad to see this here! As I've told you before, this is awesome. :-)
Author's Response:
Thank you :)
I hope it'll make a few readers smile ;)