[Report This]Date: 08 Aug 2011 11:09 Title: Chapter Eighteen
Waaaaait a moment...So all this was just some kind of the Prophets' trick to get what they wanted? Poor Weyoun, abused by two god-like species for their own purpose. No surprise he ended up so frustrated and angry.
I totally enjoyed this story, especially rebelled Weyoun and his planning. It was interesting to see him coming to the good side, but still keeping all those characteristics that made him such an effective tool in the Founders' hands. Just this time he used those features for his own purpose...err...the Prophets' manipulated purpose...
Author's Response: Hehe, thank you! It was ready to burst out of me the whole time to just tell the twist at the end, but not doing it was the best thing. I'm so glad I was able to keep him IC, thank you! I just love the Vorta and find them intriguing from a writer's point of view. I just can't resist the urge to get in there and screw with their heads with my writing! I'm going to be doing essays soon (as soon as schoolwork allows) about the Vorta and starting the Kurill Prime series. Thanks again for sticking with me as I finished this story!
Date: 08 Aug 2011 10:47 Title: Chapter Seventeen
So, Weyoun doesn't intend to give the Founder the powerful, dangerous orb, but a fake. Certainly, that would reveal to them that he no longer serves them and that would mark the moment when the Vorta become really free...and hunted, possibly.
That would also create an interesting split of the species: on one hand we have the free Vorta in the Alpha Quadrant, on the other--still bred by the Founders slave Vorta of the Gamma Quadrant. I suppose the GQ Vorta would consider AQ Vorta traitors, while AQ Vorta would pity GQ Vorta for lacking free will.
A good chapter.
Date: 24 Jul 2011 12:46 Title: Chapter Fifteen
I have no idea why Weyoun would be interested in this 'orb of madness' that made Romulans go nuts. They are plotting something.
And the baby? Somehow Keevan doesn't strike me as a material for a father. He's too lazy for this ;)
Author's Response: Keevan doesn't strike me as a responsible adult, much less a father. Though, he has had a lot of responsibility put on him now, hasn't he? We'll see how well he handles this one. The next chapter is nearly finished. There's only a few more and this story will be wrapped up!
[Report This]Date: 19 Jun 2011 05:21 Title: Chapter Fourteen
Odo clearly feels responsible for the actions of his people. He didn't harm the Vorta, but he tried to fix the damage that has been done to them. That's makes him a powerful ally of the "rebelled" Vorta, but I don't think Weyoun realises that. Yet.
[Report This]Date: 19 Jun 2011 04:42 Title: Chapter Thirteen
"She was…aesthetically pleasing." I love how Vorta-like it's phrased. They started to see these things, but still are not sure how to intrpret them and how to name them.
Did Weyoun send Laelin to deal with Keevan and keep an eye on him? LOL She seems to do a good job. Is her "aesthetically pleasing" appearance supposed to help her in this task?
I almost forgot about that mysterious orb. Now I wonder what the Founders might want to do with it and I am sure it's nothing good.
Author's Response: I enjoy writing the parts where Vorta are experiencing physical attraction. This is such a new and exciting (though they wouldn't admit it) aspect to their nature and you're right, they don't quite know what to do with it. Keevan especially is a lot of fun with it because he's such a man. Demanding that a woman let him go to the bathroom first because he feels that she'd take forever is exactly what I'd expect my husband to do, if I had one.
Date: 27 May 2011 05:14 Title: Chapter Eleven
Beware, I happen to have a pack of Japanese udon noodles are home! ;)
So, Keevan is supposed to be Vorta "ambasador" to the Federation? That could go wrong in soooo many ways. I still don't trust him, especially not after his show toward Kira. The man doesn't seem to know what is required in a dimplomat--ironic, considering what is one of main tasks of the Vorta in the Dominion. But then--he only commanded a ship and wasn't a real diplomat, so maybe he wasn't designed for this. He could mess up a lot, either unintintionally, or intentionally. It's hard to tell.
Weyoun is risking a lot, trusting him.
But the idea of settling on some world and perhaps rebuilding what the Vorta had lost--their home, their culture and their lives and independence--is intruiging. We'll see where it gets them.
[Report This]Date: 27 Mar 2011 12:29 Title: Chapter Ten
What I have already said on TrekBBS ;)
Let's just hope that betrayal of everyone isn't Keevan's speciality. For his own comfort, he could turn his back against anyone, Founder or no Founder.
Weyoun knows what he wants, he seems to have it planned in details and is ready to do everything that is necessary to achieve his goal.
This is going to get messy when the Founders learn about it. Or the Jem'Hadar--for them this would be an ultimate sigh of betraying their gods and they would not tolerate that. Weyoun has to be very careful.
Date: 07 Mar 2011 07:09 Title: Prologue
Since I can't reply to reply, I'll write another "comment." ;)
Regarding Weyoun and child-like; I think this is very accurate observation. If you remember him from DS9 episode "Ties of Blood and Water," Weyoun there likes games and is very cheerful and cute at some moments.
I always hypothesised that Weyoun 5 was in "peace mode," so cheerful and playful. Later he entered "war mode," so became deadly serious and stiff. Weyoun Nine cearly should be in "peace mode," therefore you can make his as cute as it gets ;)
Author's Response: I have that clip of Weyoun at the Dabo table on youtube! I love, love it. He's a great character and part of an even better species! Thank you so much for sticking with my and this story. It means a lot to me!
Date: 07 Mar 2011 06:27 Title: Chapter Nine
Seems like the situation just complicated a bit more. Kira has a decision to make, Weyoun has his big plans and clearly would do all it takes to fulfil them. Though, the plans don't seem "evil" since he hopes that Kira would turn the blind eye and he has Odo's support, even if rather forced.
Weyoun wondering if wrinkles were "aesthetically unattractive" just cracked me up :D
Author's Response: Hehe, I'm glad you liked it! I'd love to make just this snippet of Weyoun's inner thoughts. I think I will later in the story. I just see him as being extremely ADD and almost child like when he's not in this dead serious state of mind.
Date: 14 Feb 2011 06:22 Title: Chapter Eight
Is it a Pah Wraith orb? That would explain why poor Romulans lost their minds.
Author's Response: Some would argue that they are a little off already after the last Star Trek movie. haha, I kid, I kid. Thank you for the review! I'm finishing up the next chapter and will have it to my beta by the weekend.
[Report This]Date: 28 Dec 2010 04:45 Title: Chapter Seven
Seems like Weyoun fury and frustration, cause by his discovery, broke the conditioning to blindly worship the Founders. He's mad, he had been lied all his life, his people suffered terribly and were destroyed and all he wants now is to fix this, rebuild it and he nothing would stop him from achieving it.
While I don't agree with all his methods, I must say I am fascinated by this Weyoun-rebel. I hope he's going to get what he wants and that it wouldn't cost others and his conscience too much.
I just wish I'd see the Changellings' faces when they discover.
Date: 27 Dec 2010 08:26 Title: Chapter Six
So, Kira tries to come up with some ways to explain what had happened on the Romulan warbird. Including something unrelated to the orb and Bajor.
I wonder what Julian works on that he locks himself in his private office not to be disturbed :)
And seems like Weyoun's discovery influenced his behaviour. Kira might not know why he became so rough and his usual sleekness disappeared but I bet it has something to do with his great disappointment in the Founders and their lies.
Date: 27 Dec 2010 07:56 Title: Chapter Five
Oh-oh, a dark, red orb? I smell Pah Wraith's job here. What had happened to the crew would confirm that--pure evil destroyed poor Romulans.
Oh boy, Vorak is getting on my nerves too, with that self-righteous, arrogant attitude of his. Some Vulcans can be really infuriating.
Off to next chapter :)
Author's Response: When I thought of Vorak, I thought of this one DS9 episode I saw, "Take Me Out to the Holosuite" I believe. The character name escapes me, but he was the main antagonist of the episode. It was fun to write for Lesedi more, especially when with Vorak! I'm working on a short between those two, hopefully I'll have it done in the next few days.
Date: 22 Dec 2010 04:49 Title: Chapter Six
ooh interesting. sounds like Kira's on to something and taking Julian along for the ride. wonder what he will uncover. :)
[Report This]Date: 21 Dec 2010 06:43 Title: Chapter Five
omg Lilly, this is just wonderfully awesome :D you are seriously bang-on with Weyoun's patronizing arrogance and subtle slyness. i can just see Jeff Combs having the time of his life acting out such scenes were this a script for an episode. you've also done well with Kira and as i told you, i'm really like Lesedi. i'm seriously intrigued to see where it goes next. keep it up!!
Author's Response: Ahh, you're wonderful! Thank you for leaving a review! I'm really glad that you are enjoying this and I hope that I don't disappoint. Another chapter is coming soon, I'm about 3/4 done. I'm going to push to have the chapter after this one done as a Christmas present!
[Report This]Date: 18 Dec 2010 18:50 Title: Chapter Four
I knew it! I knew the vision wasn't just a dream without any meaning!
Weyoun checked the facts. He was curious enough and now he knows the truth. And in spite of his faith, he can see that a lie is a lie. He finally understands that he and his people were used and abused by the Changelings. He wants to do someting about it.
And a cliffhanger ending of the chapter? I hope the next chpter is going to follow soon!! :)
Author's Response: Thank you for the review! Yes, finally Weyoun does something that is openly defiant. I've been waiting impatiently to be able to write that chapter. School and work conspired against me though, until now! I've got the first portion of the next chapter written and am going to be working on it more today. Hopefully I will get most of it done tonight or have it finished. To expedite putting it on here, I'm skipping the beta reading and instead proofing it myself, going through it with a comb. Again, thank you a million times over!
Date: 30 Nov 2010 12:54 Title: Chapter Three
Ho ho. Weyoun and Kira do seem to know how to dance around one another and make pointed comments about one another. Quite interesting to see the adversarial relationship between the two. There are similarities with Kira's relationship with Dukat but striking differences too. But it all makes for great character dynamics. Loving it.
The dynamics are made all the more glorious when enmeshed in a story that is getting more intriguing and is in aprt dependent upon reading between the lines of what people are saying to glean what they are thinking and feeling. Very interesting. Just why Weyoun, and apparently Odo too, are interested in this region of space is damned infuriating. I want to know why! Agh! Very good to get the reader wanting more.
Author's Response: Ugh, this is wonderful, thank you! Reviews like this are priceless to me. I'm working on the next chapter more and I hope you like it. It should be done next week. (I hope, haha)
Date: 29 Nov 2010 04:43 Title: Chapter Three
What is the little Vorta up to this time, ah? Certainly it's not just star charts of an insignificant area of space!
Author's Response: Hopefully you won't have to wait so long this time to find out! I'm already working on the next chapter and I think you'll be pleased with it. Thank you so much for continuing to read this, I appreciate it!
Date: 14 Oct 2010 22:36 Title: Chapter Two
This chapter does have a different feel to the others so it was a little disconcerting to read it. However, some interesting developments in terms of knowing that Weyoun's motivations are less than honest and he has a hugely ulterior motive. Add to that the slice of life before the Vorta became the Vorta we know in DS9. Interesting how the idea of resurrection cloning has on changing their society so radically.
Author's Response: I'm glad you found some of the elements different. I really wanted this chapter to be taken differently because the setting is so different and has a very present day feel to it, at least I thought so. If you didn't care for it, I do hope you continue to read. This is the only chapter like this, and all the other scenes that'll be published from it aren't full of necessary information. That's all in the chapter.
[Report This]Date: 13 Oct 2010 10:27 Title: Chapter Two
Oh, I enjoyed the chapter all right!
Actually I am not sure it was only a vision. It was the Orb of Time, so it might have sent him to the past! To show him that what he believes, what Weyoun 6 had told Odo, is in fact a lie. If he could only understand it.
I wonder what kind of impact - if any - this is going to have on Weyoun.
Author's Response: Ugh, I think I love you! Haha. I would love to tell you all the things I have planned, but I shall keep silent and keep unveiling it in the writing. Hopefully this chapter will come much quicker, I plan to get started tonight. I will say that this chapter was originally longer, but I ended up cutting it down some and planning a few one-shot 'scenes' instead. If you'd like to read more about this place where Weyoun was, either in his head, the orb, or for real, then those will be available soon! :-)
Date: 21 Sep 2010 17:59 Title: Chapter One
Interesting dilemma here, with Starfleet questioning the role Ben Sisko's faith had in his disappearance. Starfleet Command was never comfortable with one of their officers becoming a religious icon, and it seems they are even less so now that he's apparently 'ascended' to become one with the Prophets.
Kira's obviously grown and matured over the past seven years, and shows the Federation delegation her most reasonable side while discussing both a topic and a person close to her heart.
Commander Mensah is an interesting new addition to the equation, and evidences a surprisingly open mind regarding spiritual matters for a member of Starfleet. Somehow, I don't think we've seen the last of her.
One question about this chapter, though. Was Kira demoted following the war? During the last season of DS9, Kira held the rank of colonel. I'm wondering if she did or said something that caused her to be demoted by the Bajoran Militia?
Excellent first chapter, and welcome to Ad Astra!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I could've sworn I already answered this. I'm sure that avoiding conflict as far as religion goes has been a Starfleet priority. But, I don't see how some members, like Vorak, could resist using the thing with Sisko as reasoning for what's happening. I think if DS9 continued, it would be a subject that the producers would have had to address. Chapter three will feature the explanation about Kira, I couldn't get it in chapter two, but it should be towards the beginning of the next one. Thanks again and I hope you enjoy it!
Date: 21 Sep 2010 13:30 Title: Chapter One
Isn't Kira a Colonel by now? Ah, never mind. That's not important.
Soooo, Weyoun wants an orb experience? Honestly? Or does he plan something nasty? Somehow I don't fully trust his "sincerety"; he is a perfect liar, every Vorta is. There must be some reason behind it and I wonder if it wasn't the Founders, who sent him there with some plan and this is part of that plan.
So far the story poses more questions and no answers. I like it :D
Author's Response: See, that got me because originally I thought it was Colonel. I'm not a huge Kira fan so I don't have her rank memorized, but my beta said it was Major. For consistency I'll keep it Major, but thanks for noting that, I appreciate it. If I do any sequels or companions to Libernobis, I'll try to remember that. I wouldn't trust Weyoun either, you're right. A Vorta, any Vorta, is gifted at deception! Thanks for reading and I'm so glad you like it! I hope you continue to enjoy it.
Date: 20 Sep 2010 19:37 Title: Chapter One
ok so I didn't know what the title meant and I was sufficiently intrigued to try and work out. Now, so far I've it narrowed down to either Free Prayer or the Book of Prayer or such like. Anywhere near?
If I am in the ball park that makes the title following on from this chapter very fitting and makes for a very interesting story before us. I didn't expect the issue of faith to come up in this tale - it normally doesn't in a Trek story. However, with the acceptance of the Bajorans into the Federation it stands to reason that some issues might arise. Now, personally I've always felt that the Federation was very secular but that its open and embracing culture meant it was open to religious faiths even if certain captains in time have remarked about religion no longer existing within the Federation. They also happen to say that about money and it seems hard to accept it as a reality! So I've never imagined faith as being a particularly controversial topic for the Federation/Starfleet. However, you like some others authors have made it a compelling enough idea and have set down a good crux of a story debate and juicy issue to stew over. Throw in the added dimension of Weyoun being open to have an Orb experience you really start to make things interesting.
So has Weyoun forsaken his resolute belief in the Founders? Is he perhaps up to something nefarious? Or is there some third party involved considering the mysterious attack on the ship before it went thorugh the wormhole. Fascinating stuff.
Author's Response: I've noticed that the whole faith thing seems kind of off limits in Trek and honestly I do get why. That's a pretty touchy issue in the real world, much less on television and written literature. I don't think it would've been an issue in my story either except that at the end of the war/DS9 tv series, Sisko became MIA like he did. Though, I really hope that I don't disappoint with it and I feel compelled to tell you that your review is making me continue to revise my outline some, so I really, really appreciate your thoughtful comment! They are so beneficial! As for the other stuff though....I shall remain silent and I just hope you enjoy the story!
Date: 20 Sep 2010 19:17 Title: Prologue
Wasn't concerned with what the Founders wanted! Tut tut. And I wonder if this signals to something more going on. An intriguing opening instalment Isadorabelle. There's a lot to chew on here considering this is the first post war Dominion contact. What is the purpose of the visit and just what the heck has happened to the ship? Lots to ponder and a good strong start. Look forward to reading more to get a feel of what this is all about.
P.S. Hope to see you over on the forums!
Author's Response: I felt so bad for Weyoun as I wrote the beginning because I'm not a bodily fluid kind of person. I totally sympathized with his shuddering as I wrote the prologue. Poor Vorta! Thank you so much for leaving a review, and I'll definitely go on over to the forums to say hey!
Date: 20 Sep 2010 04:31 Title: Prologue
Intriguing beginning! What killed the Jem'Hadar and incapacitated Weyoun's ship... and how will his arrival be met by Starfleet and the Bajorans?
Author's Response: Thank you! I hope the story continues to be an interesting read for you. You'll just have to keep reading to see about the ship!! Thanks!