Date: 07 Dec 2011 22:26 Title: Chapter 3
I like where this story is going so far, even though I have to back track to follow the plot. Man this plot is fast moving and detailed! I like that brief scene with Neeley and that male officer, especially the 'mentally undressing her down' part. Morcheeba have a song called Undress Me Now, really good, and that song sprung to mind!
Author's Response: I hadn't really considered, although it is something of a hint of the sexual tension between her and Morrison, but she doesn't quite take kindly to a younger lower ranking male officer looking at her in that way.
Date: 05 Dec 2011 23:42 Title: Chapter 2
I think you and I differ big time on Section 31's profile. In your story (and series), it is known a lot more than is let on in DS9. Whereas in my series, I always think of Section 31 being known only to a select few Starfleet admirals, certain members of the Federation Council and others (who have accidently learnt of its existance, like Sisko and Bashir (and in my series, Ezri)).
I just think Section 31 feels more 'cooler' if only a handful of people know about it. Whereas the way you portray it, I don't know, some of the mystery about Section 31 is lost.
Author's Response: Well, all the more reason to read on, but as you'll eventually see that Section 31 has its own way covering its tracks and making it look like whoever knows about them is just making baseless accusations. You could also think of it as reconciliation between DS9 portraying 31 as an organization shrouded in obscurity and the Hidden Frontier universe portraying them as that bug in the house you can't get rid of.
Date: 02 Jul 2010 04:42 Title: Chapter 2
The dialog between Cole and Markalis was spot on!! It throws an interesting angle into this story your are telling.
Rob
Author's Response: If you've read my preliminary character biographies, it mentions that Markalis has Asperger's syndrome. One rule-of-thumb is that aspies are bad liars, so she isn't entirely hip to the idea of becoming an intelligence agent. But Cole just interprets her non-answers as "maybes".
Date: 01 Jul 2010 20:52 Title: Chapter 1
I'm guessing Section 31...gruesome fate for the people on that planet...
Rob
Author's Response: Definitely Section 31, although this CMO will be a little defensive than Bashir was about Sloan showing up in his quarters in the middle of the night.
Date: 01 Jul 2010 20:45 Title: Prologue
Okay..nice simple start. Moving on to Part 2