Date: 19 Feb 2015 20:40 Title: Chapter 5
Yes, Spock, you need to shower. Well, somehow I am not surprised by this turn of events. In a previous chapter he had taken notice of the way her undergarments showed through the fabric of her dress. I suspected there was something more than friendship there.
A great job of describing pon farr's rigorous demands.
Date: 19 Feb 2015 20:29 Title: Chapter 4
Hmm. That was some touch. I am intrigued to know what it is about this woman that has Spock so "agitated".
Date: 19 Feb 2015 18:07 Title: Chapter 3
Wow, this mysterious woman really has a hold over Spock. The suspense built as he slowly made his way through the beautiful countryside--so unlike arid Vulcan--into this female relative's presence. Last of all, the youthful figure of Spock created by T'pavan, and then T'pavan herself.
Your descriptions are captivating.
Date: 19 Feb 2015 17:18 Title: Chapter 2
The plot thickens. So the Vulcans have colonized their sister planet. And many living there are freer with their emotions.
Great interplay here between our favorite three. I simply must see where all this is leading.
Date: 08 Jun 2010 18:05 Title: Chapter 2
I like this a lot so far. You do really well capturing the voices of the TOS crew, and the story is interesting. Your writing is very good -- I love the way you describe physical actions, facial expressions and the setting. I'll be watching to see what happens next!