Date: 19 Feb 2015 22:04 Title: Chapter 7
Whoa. Well, they did not wait for the guests to leave. I am wondering if that one night will be enough, and sadly realize that Spock will pay a price for this. But he is alive.
Date: 19 Feb 2015 21:52 Title: Chapter 6
Okay, he's made it this far. But yes, what shame to present himself in that condition. T'pavan tells him that what happens in the family stays in the family, but I don't know if this is the time to be calling him an "almost-brother". Spock's thoughts are not the least bit brotherly. I do hope those guests leave soon.
Date: 19 Feb 2015 20:40 Title: Chapter 5
Yes, Spock, you need to shower. Well, somehow I am not surprised by this turn of events. In a previous chapter he had taken notice of the way her undergarments showed through the fabric of her dress. I suspected there was something more than friendship there.
A great job of describing pon farr's rigorous demands.
Date: 19 Feb 2015 20:29 Title: Chapter 4
Hmm. That was some touch. I am intrigued to know what it is about this woman that has Spock so "agitated".
Date: 19 Feb 2015 18:07 Title: Chapter 3
Wow, this mysterious woman really has a hold over Spock. The suspense built as he slowly made his way through the beautiful countryside--so unlike arid Vulcan--into this female relative's presence. Last of all, the youthful figure of Spock created by T'pavan, and then T'pavan herself.
Your descriptions are captivating.
Date: 19 Feb 2015 17:18 Title: Chapter 2
The plot thickens. So the Vulcans have colonized their sister planet. And many living there are freer with their emotions.
Great interplay here between our favorite three. I simply must see where all this is leading.
Date: 19 Feb 2015 17:10 Title: Chapter 1: The Game Begins
Terrific writing, as usual. Your Vulcan T'pavan is not without emotions, as some would believe. Particularly where her young daughter is involved. I am wondering what this humanized Klingon is up to, and how it will involve Spock. I simply must continue reading.
Date: 08 Jun 2010 18:05 Title: Chapter 2
I like this a lot so far. You do really well capturing the voices of the TOS crew, and the story is interesting. Your writing is very good -- I love the way you describe physical actions, facial expressions and the setting. I'll be watching to see what happens next!
Date: 22 Apr 2010 19:38 Title: Chapter 1: The Game Begins
This is an odd beginning...
Author's Response: Is it an odd beginning? Why? My interest is piqued!
Date: 18 Apr 2010 01:44 Title: Chapter 1: The Game Begins
This is a very interesting beginning. Why would someone kidnap T'Pavan's child? Why is there a Klingon disguised as a human, and what does he want with Spock? And will T'Pavan really go through with it? I'm very intriuged, and can't wait to read more! :)