Date: 21 Aug 2013 00:11 Title: 'The Den'
Yes I think the den would be a great place for a game of poker, but not for poor Noah who it seems has let the senior officers fleece him. He does seems a odd choice to be invited to the senior offices poker game, but by letting him off Eddie show a little of that nicer side that shines occasionally. Good work.
Date: 09 Jul 2013 01:50 Title: 'The Den'
Think of it as an order!
Fun little slice of life there - I wonder if Noah is playing below par because he's afraid that winning will be bad for his career?
Well done!
Date: 19 Jan 2010 21:17 Title: 'The Den'
AN uncomfortable time that you conveyed perfectly. I missed Stanley, too, and it was nice to see him again.
Date: 17 Jan 2010 11:08 Title: 'The Den'
Ordinary times on the Kestrel aren't quite so ordinary for a rookie ensign who at first look doesn't really seem to fit into this crew of 'unusual' characters.
I've said it before, the poor kid needs to get a break. He didn't get one here but maybe it's a first step into the right direction.
Author's Response:
hey thanks CeJay for reading. Yeah, Noah does get a little break here - a tiny weeny little one - or at least there's no McGregor around! Hopefully the sage words from Stan and co. will help him get things together. Look out for this again in the story proper when the time comes - but there'll be some extra stuff in it as this was pared down to fit the challenge entry. Really appreciate the reading and feedback.
Date: 14 Jan 2010 05:13 Title: 'The Den'
I am a die-hard Stan fan. And it is really good to see Noah actually get a break, too! A sweet tale, kind of funny, really down-to-earth.
Author's Response:
Thank you Steff for reading. I'm glad Stan still has you as a fan. It means a lot to him and me. And Noah had to get a break at some point. [Not for long mind]
Date: 14 Jan 2010 05:05 Title: 'The Den'
A friendlier game than the outright fleecing I was expecting, and a good description of what the ship has available for the crew to do in their off-hours. I could really see it all.
Author's Response:
Thank you Gojirob. I'm glad I conveyed what the ship has to offer. I can picture a lot of the ship myself in my head but sometimes getting that across can be forgotten or not achieved. I'm delighted you could see it and thank you for reading it.
[Report This]Date: 13 Jan 2010 21:24 Title: 'The Den'
Oh, poor Noah. He is sooooooo awkward. I love how they talk about him in front of him like he's not even there, and then continue to do so when called out on it. Maybe once he gets a few drinks in him, he'll lighten up? Somehow I predict disaster. I wish there was going to be another chapter of this!
I loved the detailed description of the ship, too. Like being there!
A great entry, which I truly enjoyed reading!
Author's Response:
Thanks kes. Awkward is Noah's middle name I'm beginning to think. As for the detail of the ship thankyou. That was something I wanted to get across and I have such a visual in my head of that room. In fact, I'd love to have such a room - especially the view! As to having more to the tale - well there will be when it gets worked back into the main story. So you'll have to wait ... ;)
Thanks for reading.