Date: 20 Dec 2013 00:51 Title: Head of Resistance
Sorry, but this feels unfinished to me. Will the Resistance triumph? Will they move their headquarters/location now that Eris and Gul Kellem have discovered it? What was Dolim's role? Did he give Depac up on purpose, knowing that the Cardassians sent to capture/kill him would fail? And what was the purpose od having them find the Resistance leader? Was it a chance for him to embarrass the occupation forces? A way to show them that the Resistance was alive and well, and was guaranteed to make trouble for the Cardassians down the line?
This is intriguing to be sure, but begs to be revisited, have all the loose ends sewn up. Maybe this is due to my unfamiliarity with this particular era in the Trek universe, but I'd like to see a little more resolution here. This has so much potential, it just needs a little more to make it come full circle. Is the tale continued in another story?
Author's Response: Yeah, I acknowledge that it feels unfinished. The resistance movement is something I want to revisit, and they do eventually win as New Xindus is liberated from the Dominion at the end of the war. Here I wanted to give it a proper intro for further battles. His capture of Kellem and Eris was to demonstrate the power of the Resistance and to ensure the Dominion did not under estimate him.
Date: 15 Dec 2013 00:53 Title: Anvil of the Gods
JLP, now that was an interesting dominion story you let Eris shine in her own light as a junior Vorta, as the others seek glory by murdering innocent Colonist, who never got a warning or a reason for their genocide by the Dominion.
The story build and development felt true to the dominion mindset and yet while keeping Eris a loyal Vorta, you give her some personality.
I like the spying and observation followed by the individual encounter and the Bajorian stating his faith been what seem to flick the Senior Vorta to feeling they had to wipe out the aliens. Still ending with the set up for Her encounter with Sisko was a nice little touch.
Date: 30 Jun 2013 14:18 Title: History of the Teplan Blight
Your Dominion viewpoint stories are always interesting and this one about why the Dominion virus bombed the Teplan world, is a nice piece and twist on the monthly challenge of forgiveness.
Felt the last bit between Eris/Prilla up an extra dimension. that finished the story nicely.
Date: 03 Jun 2013 06:54 Title: History of the Teplan Blight
It's so hard for me to wrap my head around anything other than feelings of negativity when it comes to the whole Dominion conflict, but this made me stop and think about what it must have been like on the other side. So in essence, this really fell in line with the challenge of "forgiveness" on a personal level. Good stuff.
Date: 02 Jun 2013 06:42 Title: History of the Teplan Blight
This represents an interesting way to turn things on their head. It is said, the victors write history...
Date: 29 May 2013 01:11 Title: History of the Teplan Blight
That was one interesting expansion of the story of how the Dominion imposed the Teplan plight. I always thought it was the Dominion who made the aggressive move and the Teplans gave their all fighting against the Jem'Hadar. But now it seems the Teplans started this conflict and possibly brought about their curse (the Blight) due to terrorism and guerilla warfare.
Having said history is written by the victors, so I feel the Dominion -- or particular the Vorta who are in charge of administrative affairs and record keeping -- put a positive spin on their actions by claiming that the Templan were the aggressors. In other words the Dominion are trying to portray themselves as a fair civilization, or organisation, when really every Dominion world and citizen is at the mercy of the Founders.
An interesting twist that is for sure.
Also, why do I get the feeling that Admiral Monroe and Eris have a relationship of sorts going on? It's just Monroe does seem to be around Eris a lot. So it's strange...
Author's Response: Thanks for the feedback, and don't worry. Eris is still faithful to Liska. Also, the Founders do very little governing in the grand scheme of things, leaving the Vorta to pretty much do everything. After all, why concern themselves with the affairs of solids when you can have your grander existence in a giant ocean?
Date: 23 May 2013 16:14 Title: History of the Teplan Blight
Interesting how they see WWII - and are trying to get their own atrocities to be seen the same way.
Date: 17 May 2013 18:18 Title: "Stand on your head."
Oh, Odo. He was always good for a winning piece of humor in his grumpy way and I could totally see him doing this to Weyoun. With the war going on and him stuck on the station (and being reverered as a God), Odo would be wise to take advantage of this power for a little amusement ... and he did here. Nicely done.
I appreciated Liska's thoughts on the war effort and how things were progressing. Despite DS9 focusing so much on the captured station during that part of the war, we never really got to see the nitty gritty internal workings of the Dominon or any of the other Dominion types of troops. I liked that you brought the engineers to the forefront here and showcased them, as you'd have to expect them to exist in any war effort but they were rarely mentioned onscreen.
The ending made me smirk.
Date: 02 May 2013 04:01 Title: "Stand on your head."
I'm not exactly sure what's going on, but there is something entertaining about the thought of Weyoun standing on his head for that long!
Date: 01 May 2013 15:27 Title: "Stand on your head."
Ow!
Author's Response: I think I lost my sense of aesthetics with that!
Date: 06 Oct 2012 13:23 Title: Tales of the Dominion
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Date: 02 Sep 2012 01:16 Title: Head of Resistance
Hmmm, why did I get the feeling that it would end up with Eris being outwitted once Corr very easily gave up Depac so easily. It was almost like a Vorta being beaten at his or her own game.
Author's Response: Never underestimate the Xindi.
Date: 29 Aug 2012 14:47 Title: Head of Resistance
Ah, finally a setback. I was wondering when you'd have Eris have one.
Date: 01 Aug 2012 00:04 Title: Anvil of the Gods
A very cold recounting of this situation. You know, I always felt that the New Bajor settlement got a bit of a raw deal in terms of how its obliteration came to pass and be known about in canon. I suppose it worked to an extent to portray an aspect of the Dominion but I much prefer the cold, brutal depiction here.
Author's Response: Thank you for the feedback! I felt it necessary to provide some guidelines to Dominion policy. This is something that required the Founders to get involved, which is why they go for a massacre.
Date: 29 Jul 2012 20:07 Title: Anvil of the Gods
Yowch! The things people are willing to do in the name of a god, or at what they perceive to be the will of a god...
I'm certainly no DS9 or Dominion expert, but I got the impression that this mess was the precursor to the Dominion war - the act that led the sides to fight one another. I agree with jespah - chilling, but not so different from those things that lead to armed conflict in our own time. Well done, and interesting to see it from the perspective of those that we would consider to have committed atrocities against innocents.
Author's Response: Thank you for your feedback. Yes, this is a tie-in to the Season 2 finale "The Jem'Hadar," which formally introduced the Dominion.
Date: 24 Jul 2012 01:29 Title: Anvil of the Gods
Egad. And Eris can't really question a god now, can she?
Chilling.
Author's Response: One thing I was going with this was to show the complex nature of being a Vorta. On the one hand, they do have free will. On the other, they are programmed to obey the Founders without question.
Date: 28 Jun 2012 01:56 Title: Assault on Moreska
Lots of battle lines getting drawn here. The Clone resurrection stuff is interesting and both DS9 and nuBSG failed I think to fully explore and capitalise on the impact of it on the clones. Great to see you doing so here to interesting effect.
Author's Response: Thank you! Personally, I think the Vorta as a whole were not fully explored. While Jeffrey Combs did give a fantastic performance as Weyoun, I think they needed another major recurring character.
Date: 22 Jun 2012 17:22 Title: Assault on Moreska
When Liska made her move I just wanted to shout 'hooray'! And Cerrein certainly deserved what he got. An exciting piece.
Author's Response: Thank you! Originally, I intended for Liska to go with Arjagul Hesar and then Eris was the one who Gunship Rescues them, since I've written a few where Eris is the one who needs saving. However, as I started writing the battle scene, I felt that Liska had nothing to do in the battle. Plus, as Hesar's second-in-command, he would likely leave her in charge for the coming assaults.
Date: 19 Jun 2012 14:29 Title: Assault on Moreska
You have a great eye for battle sequences - very believable and easy to follow. I also liked that the soldiers are teenagers (you could also have rather old soldiers as well); that was reminiscent of the end of the Confederacy/the end of the Nazis. The whole thing had a Battle of the Bulge feel to it.
Author's Response: I tried to avoid the "Space is 2D" trope; however, I realized this would be difficult even in written form. It was also my intention to finally show some surface combat, something which I feel was severely lacking on DS9. As you've said you have not seen DS9 yet, there is a reference to a Cardassian Order (which is wiped out by the Klingons) consisting entirely of "old men and the walking wounded."
Date: 14 Jan 2012 03:44 Title: Star Trek: Laughing Sawfish
A few things grabbed me here: Nazar being Muslim, and a nice little backstory about Islam in the 24th century. I like spirituallity, and it is nice you including them in.
I'll read tomorrow and see where this story goes (it's 3:45am right now in Britain). I haven't formed a opinion about this story, though I've noticed you tend to jump from different first person POV's and for me it feels a little disconcerting because it happens so suddenly. Maybe I'm not used to that sort of thing...
One more thing; who is Tarska Hesar? Is he a Xindi, a Cardassian or a Vorta? I could not tell from this chapter.
[Report This]Date: 31 Oct 2011 08:15 Title: The Renewal Offensive
Loved the Xindi in ENT, so this was a pretty neat look at them in the "present" day. Very well done.
[Report This]Date: 08 Sep 2011 21:29 Title: Bringing Down the Baron
Ah! What a ride!
I have personally found it difficult to write battles. Personal fights are one thing, as there are expressions, grunts, often speech and the like. But battles seem to require more visuals.
But I truly think you pulled this off. The sounds of the battle, the chatter over the comm system, the image and then the vision of the brother - and you can't tell whether he's dead or alive (wait, wait, don't tell me!), it all locks the reader in.
It was a very Top Gun story, and I mean that in the best of ways, in terms of a truly exciting battle scene and not weird Tom Cruise or bad 80s music.
Author's Response: I learned rather quickly in writing Laughing Sawfish that writing massive battles is exceedingly difficult. ;) But yeah, watching Battlestar Galactica has taught me that you can pull off quite a bit of action just within the cockpit of a fighter.
Date: 15 Aug 2011 23:52 Title: Life in Daschov
Interesting. I have not read all of the backstory so I'm at a bit of a disadvantage but the idea of a nasty POW camp is a very, very good one (I'm a huge fan of old POW escape films like Stalag 17).
And you've got a character named Carmen! I do, too (but she'll show up a lot later -- probably because she was born in the 31st century).
Date: 08 Jun 2011 11:42 Title: Dominion War Timeline
Very nice, though have you added your own events to the Dominion war timeline? Or have you based these facts on canon material? (i.e. the DS9 books set after the Dominion war)Either way this is very interesting, nice work.
Author's Response: I started out with material from the show. A lot of the characters, locations, and battles mentioned are from the Dominion War Sourcebook by Steven Long, for the now-defunct Last Unicorn series of the Star Trek RPG. Between the canon material and the RPG material, I also created some of my own events to help fill some of the holes, like Kor losing his command as the result of a battle, etc.
Thanks for reading!
[Report This]Date: 12 Jan 2011 18:25 Title: Dominion War Timeline
You write too much :P
Nicely worded, though, and well thought-out. Helps make the events easier to understand.
Oh God, I sound like my history teacher.