Date: 18 Jul 2014 08:14 Title: ST Restoration Volume I - Redemption
Ba'el Sarine is having some disturbing nightmares. I could feel like I was there with him as he awakens from his nightmare. I couldn’t imagine what it might have been like to live through the Occupation. I saw through his eyes as he tries to shake the nightmare from himself. Sounds like he isn’t too enthusiastic about meeting up with Kovat. Now you’ve got my interest piqued. I want to know what Kovat wants from Captain Sarine. Good start to this story. I’ll continue reading to see where you take this. Thanks for sharing this and keep writing.
Date: 06 Jul 2014 19:18 Title: ST Restoration Volume IV - Darkness
I love Prin so much. She really is a great character and she shines here in her talk with Kalara.
Kalara, of course, is compelling. I felt bad for poor Damien, but it rings true that in that moment, Kalara was more consumed with her tarnished honor and her warrior's bloodlust. It is to Damien's credit that he can understand that and forgive her. They are a fantastic couple.
Date: 06 Jul 2014 19:11 Title: ST Restoration Volume IV - Darkness
Wow, Ezri for the win!
The look at Q'Sar's past was chilling. This whole chapter was really well done. Oftentimes, dreamlike sequences can seem cheesy or too laden with symbolism, but this one hit the mark -- you captured the disoriented, not quite real feeling while keeping the action and dialogue relevant. Good job.
Date: 06 Jul 2014 19:06 Title: ST Restoration Volume IV - Darkness
Yet another person who isn't what he seems to be. Hopefully he can save Kane anyway.
Date: 06 Jul 2014 19:02 Title: ST Restoration Volume IV - Darkness
Kane's alive! Yay!
I feel like I need to go back and reread the other stories to remember everything that's going on here, but if was able to follow most of it. Good to see things unfolding and truths being revealed.
Date: 06 Jul 2014 18:58 Title: ST Restoration Volume IV - Darkness
Wow, Robau is having a crappy day! Great writing as always.
Date: 24 Jun 2014 16:03 Title: ST Restoration Volume IV - Darkness
WOW. This is a HUGE shift for the dynamics here. I didn't think Prin would come to free her so soon. I certainly didn't think she'd offer her the XO position, especially after Kalara's outburst in the ready room when she was accused.
It seems the brig time has gotten through Kalara's thick skull and she's ready to try to be "fire smothered with ice" (great line). The situation is desperate, so it wouldn't surprise me to have Prin say later that she wasn't entirely convinced they were going to live through all this ... but I'd rather fight with a Klingon than against one.
The lead in to the big news with Damien was well done. Dude's hurting, knows his love is hurting, and feels helpless to do anything. We've all been there and you capture those feelings of just banging one's head against the wall very well.
And then there's Sarine ... so many questions! Looking forward to the answers.
Date: 10 Jun 2014 11:35 Title: Lives of Dax: The Fall
That was so engrossing I didn't even review the individual pieces. I'd like to read more in the story of Dax...
Date: 03 Jan 2014 23:19 Title: The Fall - Year One
Nice alternate version to one of the classic Voyager episodes. I agree with trekfan that it's nice not to see Andy Dick this time around. He seemed to have the innovations Voyager's Doc was outfitted with, yet still had the same personality traits as Zimmerman.
All that aside, seems that Starfleet has gotten far more militarized and this ship's crew has gotten to be a paranoid as the Romulans from the original version.
Date: 03 Jan 2014 23:15 Title: The Fall - Year One
I have a feeling this is going to be a very complex story featuring all of the TNG-era crews. Things could still get a little dicey with Picard's negotiations to bring the Romulans into war.
Date: 16 Dec 2013 22:49 Title: The Fall - Year One
Again, nice alternate spin on Section 31's efforts to recruit Bashir.
I also had a feeling there would be Bajorans like Naral in Starfleet, whose families had long ago fled their homeworld. I trust she's one those who "accepts the distortion of their name in order to assmiliate" as Laren Ro put it.
Date: 22 Oct 2013 08:36 Title: ST Restoration Volume I - Redemption
It can be hard to get readers into a reasonably complex AU without relying on huge amounts of exposition, and I think you did a good job of not falling into that trap. We get information in chunks here and there--enough so we're not lost and stay interested, but not so much as to get bored and wonder when something's going to happen. In fact the action keeps on coming at a nice clip that makes this a consistent read, something else that's tricky in an establishment piece like this.
I like how Sarine's presented to us almost as a sort of mystery man; it makes him a lead you want to scrutinize and consider instead of just write off as The Good Guy Leading Us. This helps keep things unpredictable.
Related to this, I like that we don't get all the answers, to him or to numerous other things. It leaves more for the future and lets all those possibilities create an atmosphere that's not rigid or defined.
I basically have nothing but sympathy for Kalara. Not sure if that was intended but there you are. This is not to say I agree with how she acted towards Sarine, but I also get where she's coming from and the kind of position she's now in.
Date: 02 Oct 2013 02:01 Title: ST Restoration - Broken Dreams and Nightmares
Oof! A hard, harsh reality there, of what really happens when there are explosions and the like. I think, in our post-9/11 world, we understand better than ever that percussive injuries like this are rarely pretty.
Good for N'Vek for at least doing this much but man oh man, that's rough. Broken dreams indeed. Broken bodies is more like it.
I absolutely love the Terginians, and I did a Google search and realized - they are your invention, are they not? Very smart and appropriate, to have an alien species that is non-humanoid and truly alien.
Well done and creepy. Eek I may have a nightmare or two about this.
Date: 04 Sep 2013 17:13 Title: ST Restoration Volume IV - Darkness
Well, Q'sar's backstory gets some light here and what a light it is. A biological weapon dropped onto the planet that seemingly makes Vulcans go insane? Nasty. And the way you describe the scene, a twisted version of normalcy, just hits home. A normal night turned into a horror-filled nightmare.
The desciption of the desert area of Vulcan was also well done. The heat, the sand, and that oppressive sun came across beautifully on the page.
The showdown between Jasto and Haebron, short lived, was filled with tension. In some ways, Haebron is right to want to finish what he's started (Astrid isn't exactly a nice person) but I doubt he would have given back control once he was done. Haebron wouldn't have.
Him getting chased away by Ezri, battle-scarred, was a great moment of win. Can I get some Jadzia love? Please?
Enjoyed the chapter and the glimpse into Q'sar's history very much. Well done and looking forward to more.
Date: 04 Sep 2013 17:04 Title: ST Restoration Volume IV - Darkness
Well, the former Dr. Keene is back to his full Klingon self. He seems almost glad that he was discovered and, considering how much he hated being Keene (minus the encounters with Astrid ... ), I can't fault him for being happy to be Klingon once more. His tone is full of relief in my eyes that he IS Klingon again.
But he still killed Malok and damn it, now he's got eyes on Damian. Which we both know isn't good and we both know is going to make things worse. Kalara's situation isn't going to get better anytime soon I feel.
Kane being alive is good. The doctors lacking a CMO is not. Doctor Jack Howard has a name that makes me think he might be a distant relative of one Beverely Crusher (she formerly Beverely Howard) but I'm taking a guess. Whatever the case, he doesn't seem to want this job and he has his own demons he's fighting as well. I wonder why he chose to be exiled there? I look forward to reading more about him.
Overall, a fast paced chapter with some nice turns on established character arcs and a few new mysteries to conteplate. Onward I go and sorry for the wait.
Date: 27 Aug 2013 10:59 Title: Lives of Dax: The Fall
I should like to see more of this-you still have 199 years to cover.
Date: 27 Aug 2013 10:58 Title: Lives of Dax: The Fall
199 years? Wow. And so Dax lives...to foster hope, and a Rebellion.
Date: 27 Aug 2013 10:56 Title: Lives of Dax: The Fall
Funny how the Fall of the Federation segment is the happiest piece of this work so far.
Date: 27 Aug 2013 10:55 Title: Lives of Dax: The Fall
Grim. But Dax survives-for now.
Date: 27 Aug 2013 10:53 Title: Lives of Dax: The Fall
And now Titan...very interesting the way you are weaving all of this together...
Date: 27 Aug 2013 10:52 Title: Lives of Dax: The Fall
This is not a happy universe you operate in.
Date: 27 Aug 2013 10:50 Title: Lives of Dax: The Fall
Interesting difference in perspective as to how Ezri gets her symbiont.
Date: 27 Aug 2013 10:49 Title: Lives of Dax: The Fall
That's chilling...
Date: 09 Aug 2013 06:46 Title: The Fall - Year One
Perfect. This was a great episode ... minus Andy Dick. No.
But you got the tone right here and the Doctor's clear confusion about being accused as a Founder really registers to me. He doesn't know what the hell he's just walked into and I'm dying to see how you write the reaction of the VOY crew.
Date: 09 Aug 2013 00:33 Title: ST Restoration Volume IV - Darkness
Kalara, innocent! Keene, guilty! Kane, alive! Prin's dealing with a lot of crap right now, but she's gotta get her head around it. I'm glad to see Keene's activities finally come to light and to see Kalara being declared innocent (well, pretty much, but not officially).
Kane being alive is a relief, but how did he survive?
I liked the way you wrote the playback of the video recording and captured the kinda "slackjawed" mentality of it all. Watching Keene do those things, especially to poor Malok, must have been tough for Prin. But she knows her enemy now.
Well done.