Date: 30 Apr 2013 04:19 Title: Epilogue
Wonderful! Spock and McCoy stranded together is always good for a laugh.
Date: 14 Jul 2009 23:12 Title: Epilogue
A good wrap up! This does feel like an episode for the most part -- a definite plot, a good tie-up in the end, plenty of the big three.
Author's Response:
::Bows:: Coming from you that's significant praise, indeed! And yet, it wouldn't have been possible without your gentle encouragement back in February. You have opened up a whole new world for me, and there are no words to adequately express my heartfelt thanks.
Date: 14 Jul 2009 23:10 Title: Chapter Eight
Tense right up through this chapter, all the way to a breath out at the end!
Author's Response:
That's what I was going for, was hoping for, so I'm pleased it came across that way. :-D
Date: 14 Jul 2009 23:04 Title: Chapter Seven
I'd say that it's strong in the sense of being good prose; I think you probably have a different take on McCoy and Spock's relationship -- as in, when it went from being companions, of a sort, to being true friends. I don't see them having this sort of conversation until the movie era, myself, but it's still a very sweet conversation. Also like Komack's revenge -- what a bastard! But then, that's realistic.
One thing: It is not causing me any undue distress.”
Missing a quote in front of 'It'.
Author's Response:
Y'know, I've thought a lot about how I view their relationship, and here's why:
I think we first saw a shift in 'Bread and Circuses'. Spock was obviously worried about McCoy in the arena, and I have always viewed the 'warm feeling' conversation back in their cell as having a twofold meaning - Spock's reply of 'really, doctor' could be viewed just as concern for Jim, but I believe he was alluding to being worried about and saving McCoy from Flavius as well.
In 'The Empath', Spock was visibly concerned for Jim, but just watched him. Yet he felt the compelling need to offer McCoy physical comfort, something he didn't do for his captain, and strangely enough, something Jim didn't do for McCoy.
And in 'Plato's Stepchildren', while McCoy stoically bore the torture of Jim at Parmen's hands, he positively exploded when Spock was being mistreated.
I guess maybe I'm reading more into it than is there, but I feel that where these two are concerned, actions speak louder than words. I've always felt that if there had been a fourth season to the show, we would have seen more of this type of shift in their relationship. And besides, in my story, they believed they were going to die anyway, so what did it matter to finally be honest with one another. ;-)
That's what I love so much about fan fiction - viewing the characters through different eyes, perhaps seeing something you never realized before. Your work has done much to change my perception of Scotty, and it feels so right, I marvel that I wasn't able to see it for myself. :-D
Anyway, enough excessive rambling on my part...;-) Thanks for the wondeful and thought-provoking feedback.
Date: 14 Jul 2009 22:54 Title: Chapter Six
Scotty's accent is a touch uneven, but it's good you didn't have him back down all chastised -- one of my biggest peeves is people who have him somehow cringe and whimper in front of Kirk, like a whipped puppy. ;-) The rest was good too; Jim's message, McCoy and Spock watching out for each other.
Author's Response:
I must admit, I wrote that scene with some trepidation, and I'm relieved that it came off well. Besides, someone needs to tell Jim 'no' once in a while. ;-)
Date: 13 Jul 2009 04:53 Title: Chapter Five
Yipe! It's good that they're able to keep their humor up considering their injuries, though. And that they're above ground and have a little breathing room.
Author's Response:
Well you know those two - hide your concern for someone you pretend not to care about behind humor and mindless arguing...works every time. ;-)
Date: 13 Jul 2009 04:25 Title: Chapter Four
Awesome banter between the two of them, and even better that they work so well as a team despite it. Very professional, but very uniquely them.
Author's Response:
Glad the banter rang true. It was a blast to write. And you're right - it's very much them. They may snipe at each other, but somehow always manage to get the job done.
Date: 13 Jul 2009 04:18 Title: Chapter Three
One correction: "You are also operation under the pretense that they are intelligent..." -- should be 'operating', not operation. But otherwise, the tension notches up! Another excellent place to end a chapter; eeeek! Gives me the creepy-crawlies.
Author's Response:
Aargh! This is why one shouldn't work without a net! I must've read each chapter half a dozen times looking for typos, but being the author, I knew I wanted to say 'operating' and that's what my brain always saw. Please, let me know about any other mistakes you catch, so I can fix them. ::cheeks flushed with embarrassment::
Glad you're enjoying the story so far. :)
Date: 13 Jul 2009 04:13 Title: Chapter Two
Another solid chapter. I like how calmly Spock and McCoy handle the situation; very professional, very smooth.
Author's Response:
Calm and smooth for now, but it's Spock and McCoy! There're bound to be some fireworks. Those two can't walk to the transporter room without finding something to bicker about...::snickers::
Date: 13 Jul 2009 04:09 Title: Chapter One
This has a very classical-episode feel to it; I can almost hear the fanfare and the opening credits. Good place to break a chapter too -- it totally urges the reader on to see what happened to the intrepid duo.
Author's Response:
I am thrilled that you see it that way. That's exactly the feel I was going for. Being a novice, it helps to stick with what you know, and what is familiar. :-D
Date: 13 Jul 2009 04:05 Title: Prologue
Watson is still amused by being red-shirted! Seriously, I am. And a bit thrilled. Nutty made me an assistant Chief, and you made me dinner. Total win. ::grins::
Author's Response:
C'mon, everyone loves the redshirt/dinner. ::evil grin:: But seriously, if I had a gift for outstanding OC's like you, or Anna, I'd have definitely found better homes for you than an alien's stomach. ;-). It really was meant as a sign of respect, and thanks, for all you and Anna have done to encourage and support me. You ladies rock!!
Date: 12 Jun 2009 10:06 Title: Epilogue
A fanstastic coda to a wonderfully entertaining tale! Spock and McCoy are back where they belong, their friendship solidified by their week-long imposed exile. Kirk's relief is evident, as is his anger at being manipulated so selfishly by Admiral Komack.
But, despite everything fate and the admiralty could throw at them, they've proved to be survivors yet again.
This has been a pleasure to read and comment on. I look forward to your subsequent stories. Kudos!
Author's Response:
::bows:: I'm thrilled by all the wonderful comments and feedback you've given me for this story. It insipres me to keep at this. You're a dear for hanging in there with me until the end of the line. Kudos to you as well!
Date: 11 Jun 2009 08:18 Title: Chapter Eight
A very intense (and well written) fight scene during which Spock and McCoy finally reach an amicable understanding... though, likely only because they thought they were going to die. I will be interested to see how this conversation changes the tenor of their friendship.
The last second rescue was the end to a nail-biting scene, and was very well timed. Well done!
Author's Response:
I'm pleased if it didn't come off as too predictable. But I certainly couldn't have let anything bad happen to our heroes. ;-)
As for their friendship, I have always seen 'Tholian Web' as the turning point for them, and envision this taking place about a month or so before than episode, and my story 'Our Brother's Keepers'. And you might not have noticed, but while each of them may have thought it privately at one time or another during the course of this story, the word 'friend' was not spoken aloud by either of them with regard to one another. Some things never change. ;-)
BTW, congrats on surpassing the 100 review mark. I know I have greatly appreciated the feedback, and now that I'm virtually done with this story, maybe I can get some R&R (reading and reviewing) time in as well.
Cuppy
Date: 10 Jun 2009 05:57 Title: Chapter Seven
Some wonderful insights into both Spock and McCoy here, with Bones taking an uncharasteristically sympathetic view of the Vulcan's childhood. Again, your character portrays are astoundingly good.
It wouldn't surprise me if Kirk rigs Enterprise for silent running after dropping off the vaccine, leaving the ship unable to receive any distracting comms or mission reassignments.
Great stuff!
Author's Response:
LMAO!! Now that would be very Kirkian, wouldn't it? ;-)
As for McCoy and Spock - couldn't have them taking potshots at one another for the whole story, now could I? Trust me, there are more fireworks to come, though.
Almost done - just two more chapters to go. Thanks for hanging on with me - hopefully it won't disappoint in the end. :)
Date: 09 Jun 2009 19:24 Title: Chapter Six
Good thinking for Kirk to have left behind survival supplies for just such an eventuality. And now Spock and McCoy are being very nearly civil to one another... wonders never cease.
The Huron, unfortunately, is much more problematic, and continues to leach time and attention away from getting back to the planet. Kirk's exercising admirable patience, but I can tell it's getting thin by now.
Continued excellence with this story. It's dramatic, engaging and quite a bit of fun. :)
Author's Response:
You think Kirk's pissed now? Just wait until the next chapter. ;)
And it's not unprecedented for McCoy and Spock to be civil to each other on occasion. Can't have them bickering all the time, now can we? Alas, it never seems to last...::wicked grin::
You're a dear for having the patience to follow this and comment on it. It's greatly appreciated. :D
Date: 08 Jun 2009 05:47 Title: Chapter Five
Geez, Spock and McCoy finally make it to the surface, but Enterprise has already broken orbit to go and rescue the Huron. Pity Kirk didn't leave a manned rescue shuttle behind in orbit. :(
Again, the interaction between McCoy and Spock is marvelous. Thanks again for a terrific tale, I can't wait to see how this turns out!
Author's Response:
Unfortunately, the rescue ops will take too long to leave a shuttle - they do have limited range and fuel. ;-) And besides, he's already missing two of his crew - he'd have to risk more to leave a shuttlecraft behind.
Jim does have a surprise in store for our intrepid crewmen, however. ;-) Would you expect anything less of our resourceful captain?
I'm so glad you are enjoying this. Thanks for sticking with me. :-D
Cuppy
Date: 07 Jun 2009 09:34 Title: Chapter Four
A telepathy-assisted escape and now our dynamic duo are on the run once again. Kirk's obviously conflicted but he has a little time remaining before the clock runs out for the crew and passengers of the Huron.
Once again you've turned up the heat on the whole situation. Here's hoping our heroes can find a solution before things start to boil. :)
Author's Response:
Yep. What else could possibly go wrong? ::snickes:: Thanks for sticking with this - hopefully it won't disappoint. ;-)
Date: 06 Jun 2009 12:40 Title: Chapter Three
Oh, geez. That could have gone better. Hopefully our heroes will not become an insectoid snack pack.
Author's Response:
Unfortunately, it gets worse before it gets better.
Date: 06 Jun 2009 11:48 Title: Chapter Two
Okay, it's a bit harrowing that Spock and McCoy are trapped in the subsurface caverns with whatever ate the survey team... but their interaction is just so damn entertaining you could almost forget the peril they're in.
It must have killed Kirk to call of the search, but he had to take the same steps he would have had the two missing crew been people he hardly knew, rather than his two best friends in all the universe.
Kudos on ramping up the tension even more!
Author's Response:
Yeah, poor Jim. You know how he hates it when he has to sit something out, watching from the sidelines. ;-)
Thanks for the feedback - it means a lot!
Date: 06 Jun 2009 05:06 Title: Chapter One
Oh... crap! Yeah, it figures that it would be those two. ;)
You've done a great job ratcheting up the tension as the crew explores the empty encampment, finding more questions than answers. Nicely done.
You've got a great handle on the characters, most especially Kirk, Spock, and McCoy. I can see their bickering as if it were up on the TV screen in my head.
Author's Response:
Did you really expect anything less? I love a good Spock/McCoy verbal sparring match as much as the next person. ;-)
Thanks for the kind words and encouragement. This is my first foray into a multi-chaptered story, and I'm glad if it's reading okay.
Date: 06 Jun 2009 01:32 Title: Prologue
Whooops! Methinks someone's stumbled onto some kind of hive. Gah, who knew geology could be so dangerous?
Great setup, you've certainly got me hooked!
Author's Response:
Damn nature! Tricky stuff, that. Glad you like it so far. ;-)