[Report This]Date: 13 Oct 2011 20:24 Title: Chapter 1
Yeah, would have fit Lower Decks challenge well. Wouldn't mind visiting him again.
Author's Response:
Thanks, Mistral. Jerry was one of those characters who popped into my head and harangued me until I wrote his story down. I hadn't considered doing anything else with him, but a story where he's in OCS with Latimer might be interesting. I'll have to ponder it more; see if Jerry has any other aspects of his life he wants me to pass along. ;-)
Date: 23 May 2009 04:52 Title: Chapter 1
Aw, that's evil to leave it there :D
Nice portrait of a crewman. Poor bugger :D I like how you've given him a bit of history and his own character. And the ending is very effective :D
I had an idea for that challenge also, but never got a chance to write it. But having read this one, I now have another idea to play with. You sparked inspiration. Here's hoping I have time to write it befor eit goes stale.
I always look forward to your stories, cos I know I'll get a good one and this one fit that category well. Thanks for writing and sharing.
Nutty
(prisoner of Ork)
Author's Response:
Glad you liked it. Jerry wanted his story to be told and there was no way he was letting me out of doing it. ;-)
So, sparked some ideas, huh? Of course you know I'll be waiting with bated breath and much anticipation for your story to come out. You never should have mentioned it, cos now I won't let you forget it. ;-)
Still waiting for more on Revenge, too. ;-)
But seriously, thanks Nutty. Your support and encouragement means everything. Heartfelt thanks for all the kind words about my work. :D
Date: 22 May 2009 21:29 Title: Chapter 1
This was indeed a great lower decks tale. A wonderful insight into the nnormally nobody redshirt so often all too expendable in TOS stories! ;) What was great to see is the loyalty inspired by our fab trio in this lower decks character.
However, our lower decks guys was fleshed out with the flashback to his background and his different friendships pointed out. In addition, he was made a dumb sucker who walks into danger, instead he was wisely eyeing up the situation and reacting to the escalating danger faced by Spock and Kirk. Add to that, his desire to protect his Captain and XO makes him an everyday hero.
Kudos. I loved this tale.
Author's Response:
Thanks, Miranda, your praise is inspring. This work sprang from Kelowitz's line in the episode: "They got Lang, sir." But Lang was a LCDR, and I so wanted this to be about just your average crewman walking into a nightmare he thought was gonna be a fun, safe evening.
It was important to me to show that Jerry was a normal, everyday guy, with friends and parents (even though they weren't good ones) and human weaknesses and yet a strong sense of duty and devotion to his ship and the people on it. It really could be the story of any of the redshirts who bought it in the series. I just felt compelled to tell it. I'm usually a Kirk-Spock-McCoy girl, so I give Jerry all the credit for forcing me to tell his story. ;-)
As always, the reading, and especially taking the time to review are greatly appreciated. Heartfelt thanks! Cuppy
Date: 21 May 2009 20:02 Title: Chapter 1
I'm a sucker for good lower decks stories and this was very well done.
The flashbacks were a neat way to give us a rounded background on your protagonist and it was all nicely interwoven into Trek lore.
You always root for the redshirt but in the end ... it's always just a few more steps until they would have been safe.
Great story.
Author's Response:
This is not my usual fare, but one day this story popped into my head and wouldn't let me be. It's meant as a tribute to all the red shirts who gave their lives. We often knew little to nothing about them, and I wanted to make them real, human, give them a life and friends - people who would miss them when they were gone. I'm pleased if I managed to accomplish this.
Thanks for the positive feedback. As I said, this is a serious departure from my usual stuff, and I wasn't sure how it would be received...
Date: 21 May 2009 19:48 Title: Chapter 1
When I read the description of this story, I thought it was going to be comedic, a red shirt story played for laughs.
Was I ever wrong. This was a well rounded, very well written reflection on the sacrifices made by the average crew members of the Enterprise. I liked the flow of the story, and how the main character caught himself in brief snippets of memory while the action swirled around him.
This was a short story, but you packed a great deal of detail and emotion into such a small package. Terrific work!
Author's Response:
The lives lost on Cestus III always haunted me. Here were men beaming down, thinking they were going to have some great food, some good conversation, and a pleasant and peaceful evening. But as so often happens in the Trekverse, this was not to be. I just wanted to tell their story, to acknowledge their lives, contributions and sacrifices somehow. I'm glad if I managed to accomplish that in some small way.