[Report This]Date: 16 Dec 2019 23:52 Title: Chapter 1
Oh, this was very cool! It reminded me of a Twilight Zone episode for some reason. Very dark and unsettling and creepy, but in a good way. I liked it. :)
Author's Response: Thank you! I am a fan of the Twilight Zone-it has influenced my writing for a while...
Date: 31 May 2014 02:17 Title: Chapter 1
I found this story very intriguing. Kirk moving through different time periods looking for his wife but ending up in a mental institution. I felt his confusion all throughout the story and why the doctors didn’t believe him. They thought he was crazy. I don’t think I’d want to leave the Nexus either if I could be with someone or something that had been long gone. I like how he spoke of Spock and Picard. I think you should expand this, it seems like there could be more you could add to this. Wonderfully haunting, and good writing. Thanks for sharing.
Date: 28 May 2014 21:02 Title: Chapter 1
When this first started, I was thinking the 'part that was left behind' was the other part of Kirk--the part he took back inside him during the episode The Enemy Within, which I would find interesting. My second thought was that maybe this was a mirror universe story, only maybe Kirk himself didn't know that he was not in the right place, and therefore, neither did we.
The real answer--that he was a remnant from the Nexus, who was attracted to his own physical body after it was buried by Picard, was actually very clever and even more fascinating a story line than the two I was thinking of.
I can understand why they locked him up, and I have to wonder if they won't find themselves doing the same thing once he returns to his own time. Not that he will kill people there--I understand he was doing that here to get noticed and brought back to the future where he belonged, but if he doesn't act like the Kirk they knew and loved, I see them wanting to find out why as well, and also eventually perhaps having to handle the 'problem'.
The only two things I didn't completely understand is how Spock was supposed to identify him if he wouldn't tell them his last name, and there was no opportunity for anyone to take or publish a picture of him. Also, wouldn't Spock, knowing he's killed all those people, try to go back in time to before it happened, so that the timeline wasn't changed by their deaths?
I like the two doctors you created, especially Doctor Kim. I'd like to see this expanded, to know how Spock plans to stop Jim from carrying out his plan of seeking out Edith, if he does, and also to see what happens next for this revenant. Does he find a place?
Overall, this was a fascinating story, and one that will stay with me for a long time. Thank you.
Author's Response: I think you missed some of the point. Kirk was only a fraction of his whole self. The murdering thing was him being "not whole". But he made sure the headlines said a man claiming to be from the future committed the murders.Just like when Spock scanned for Kirk when he was with Miramanee, he never let up looking.
Date: 13 Sep 2012 08:11 Title: Chapter 1
This is so powerful and bleak...and yet, I firmly believe that Spock would not abandon even a revenant of Jim if there was any way he could come for him. I love how confident Jim is in that knowledge...even if he's not quite Jim.
Author's Response: Thanks. I am very proud of this one. Glad it rings true.
Date: 29 Apr 2009 18:53 Title: Chapter 1
This is quite an interesting story...I like it. Is this just a one part episode or is more coming???
Rob
Date: 15 Apr 2009 00:37 Title: Chapter 1
This was wonderfully terrifying, and you've retained just enough of Kirk to make it all the scarier. The ending in particular is just spectacular - bleak and hopeful all at the same time. Nicely done!
Author's Response: Thank you-one of my prouder(darker) moments, writing this. Glad you liked it.
Date: 06 Feb 2009 20:23 Title: Chapter 1
Oh yes. This is incredibly creepy. A good look at what a monster Kirk could have been without ethics... and yet you also feel sorry for the dead man and hope he finds peace somehow.
Date: 04 Feb 2009 11:36 Title: Chapter 1
One should never cross path with a dead man. Especially if this man is Jim Kirk.
Powerful story. Powerful imagery.
Thank you for sharing.
Date: 02 Feb 2009 01:44 Title: Chapter 1
Wow, this was interesting. Reminiscent of Shirley Maiewski's brilliant piece 'Mind Sifter', but much darker. Maybe the part left behind was his 'wolf' from 'Enemy Within'? A chilling story to say the least...
Author's Response: Inspired by 'Mind Sifter' which I have read a dozen times.
Date: 30 Jan 2009 22:13 Title: Chapter 1
Scarily dark - this Kirk makes the Mirror Universe Kirk look like a librarian he's so chilling.
Date: 30 Jan 2009 02:59 Title: Chapter 1
Whoa.
Tightly written, and so in-character... which makes it all the more tragic. You've very effectively scared me to bits. Well done.
Date: 29 Jan 2009 04:54 Title: Chapter 1
That was cool. Jim Kirk's essense without his conscious...no moral compass.
Great stuff.