Date: 22 Jun 2014 12:07 Title: Sinking
Ouch, that was cruel twist of fate.
You created a believable scene, the angst of noting being able to save the little Peeta and then when he try to do the last noble thing to spare the child suffering in the flames, you have the transporter come to the rescue to late.
Hard emotionally to read but your good use of language and the fact you make us care about the characters in such a short scene is credit to your writing skill. Well done.
Date: 22 Jun 2014 01:52 Title: Sinking
Oh man that's wrenching.
Date: 20 Jun 2014 20:04 Title: Soaring
Great summary of little Chase.
Was a nice insight into Tabatha life.
Date: 20 Jun 2014 09:09 Title: Soaring
Beautiful piece MF! Good use of the prompt for the day!
Thanks for sharing!
Date: 20 Jun 2014 03:56 Title: Soaring
And to soar. Lovely, as always.
Date: 19 Jun 2014 14:42 Title: Bittersweet
a pivotal moment for Ryaenn, and you capture the bittersweet realisation of successful escape from the Cardassians.
Well done.
Date: 19 Jun 2014 03:06 Title: Bittersweet
Very nice. You could feel her bewilderment and confusion at finally being safe, but not really believing it, and the sudden transition from leader to subordinate and the crash back to reality -- a comfortable reality, but one that won't fit right again for a long while. Very raw and gripping piece.
Date: 19 Jun 2014 02:15 Title: Bittersweet
Another finely written pice you have here MF! Every day I'm finding that your works are drawing me further in and keeping my interest.
Thanks for sharing this.
Date: 19 Jun 2014 02:07 Title: Bittersweet
Bittersweet indeed. I think Ryaenn has a little survivor guilt going on.
Date: 18 Jun 2014 23:33 Title: Cold
Good work, I could so hear the words of that old man in my head.
I take it he was speaking to a young Chase?
Date: 18 Jun 2014 02:06 Title: Cold
I'm trying to figure out who's speaking here (which I'm sure is the point). Of course, this guy's right.
Date: 18 Jun 2014 02:04 Title: Cold
I wonder if Maren is saying these words? Hmm... Bravo MF! Another great little piece you've shared with us.
Thanks for sharing.
Date: 18 Jun 2014 02:01 Title: Cold
Oh, I wonder who is speaking these wise words. I get the feeling they were meant for Tabatha but they sure discomfited Maren, too.
Date: 18 Jun 2014 01:59 Title: Red
I LOVED this. The banter between them is perfect.
Date: 18 Jun 2014 01:57 Title: In the Beginning...
Wow, that was dark. What is killing everyone?!
Date: 17 Jun 2014 15:15 Title: Red
Nice scene between Chase & McGregor and they both know each other buttons and the playful banter shows.
Good Job
Date: 17 Jun 2014 04:32 Title: Red
Methinks the Rear of the Year owner might need a little corrective eye surgery ....
Date: 17 Jun 2014 01:59 Title: Red
YAY! Tabatha is back! My favorite character from you MF! Like her and McGregor's banter about the color of the ship. Took me awhile to figure it out, but I finally got it.
Thanks for sharing!
Date: 15 Jun 2014 21:10 Title: In the Beginning...
Ooh! MF! That was deep. Bravo for envoking fear and sickness into the threads of this prompt. Thanks for sharing this and cannot wait to see where you take your next prompt.
Date: 15 Jun 2014 20:34 Title: In the Beginning...
All equal before death, a sombre piece and somewhat believable.
Date: 15 Jun 2014 19:48 Title: In the Beginning...
Riveting and terrifying. Very, very well-written.