That was a tough read - the prose was beautiful, as ever, but bearing witness to Carlisle's final minutes, feeling his sorrow and agony as he saw the ship (and his personnel) being battered around him.  Starting to wonder if that girder was really a blessing, or a curse...

Loved the connection here to your own universe, and OC's, just wish it was under better circumstances.  Something tells me this isn't gonna end well, unless you're rooting for the Dominion.

Dissension among the ranks.  I've always suspected that some members of the Federation felt this way, but neat to see it vocalized here.  And leave it to the Dominion to take advantage of this, driving a wedge into a small fissure which is sure to open into a huge rift.

Damn. Isn't it telling that both sides believe the other is foresaking Andoria here. The bitter ugly truth is that there is really no other choice. Andoria has fallen. It isn't Starfleet foresaking them. It isn't a cowardly Andorian people fleeing. It is the harsh reality of a singularly minded Dominion seeking a total victory. It's reaching a crescendo here. I love the build up. The chaos. The unclean nature of everything. The already ugly recriminations and fault laying as Andoria falls. And the fact that brave people are making a desperate stand. (I want to picture some of my Border Dogs doing their bit there too, holidng the line). If this were onscreen, now would be the time for epic soaring music piece.

Neat visualisation of the destruction nailing the carnage and brutal swift nature of the brute attack and it clearly demonstrates how hard tasking the Dominion forces are in this instance. I also like the shout outs to your regular verse but even apart from that, the time taken for a character to wish goodbye on their dying breath is a great way to add meaninglful impact to the events. So it ends up more than kewl 'plosions. Instead, this is life being ripped apart and away. Meantime, it is clear that the fate of Andoria is very, very precarious indeed.

oooh. Terrific window in time to take a peek into. We see clearly, that the growing threat of the Dominion worked here in so many ways to undermine the Federation. Firstly, they used their skills of spying and treachery to great effect to gain important information, but they also make pinpoint decisions about where to strike in order to cause and foster the greatest division within the powers that hold the Federation together. It is a cunning, calculated move by the Dominion. But that's perfectly their character and especially in a universe where they eventually triumph. In many ways actually, it illustrates one fault of canon whereby the Dominion seemed lose some of their bite and ruthless nature in order to facilitate a Starfleet win.

The growing hatred, division and dissension in the chambers is striking and then the choice of ending is sinister and in its own way a shocking reveal. Well played.

And a defence mission turns into a rescue mission... Harsh but understandable here from the Andorian minister, and Bronislaw is a brave man for obeying that order, knowing what it may cost his people. A truly thrilling finale here, you've done a fantastic job capturing the darkness of the Fall!

Bitter but believable, Seem to fit the Fall series well, Starfleet did they best, it just wasn't good enough.

Top marks for that dark tale.

All those sacrifice and it seems it will be for nothing.
Can Angel fleet stop the Fall (Of course not) but I’m sure there tale will be worth hearing good work.

so here comes the Hammer, nice built up, showing that they is still a lack of realisation in Starfleet.

Got to agree with the Doctor, casualties are a sure thing.

Bronislaw gave it his all, as did so many of them. Quite the portrait of bravery at the end, of final valor as the odds just overwhelmed them. This is a hard and painful end for so many, and at least some of it can be laid at the feet of the officials who miscalculated. Affecting and haunting, really terrific work here.

No happy, neat little ending here, I see. 

A lot of people shy away from killing their darlings or providing true adversity to their characters. I am pleased and impressed to see you doing both here. 

Ah, I knew there had to be a connection to Jessica, given the last name.