Date: 07 Jun 2014 19:58 Title: Chapter 1
NICE rant by the Andorian. Totally justified, and of course, made all the more chilling and prescient by that final scene.
Date: 06 Jun 2014 14:51 Title: Chapter 3
Oh, man, what a horrible ringside seat to the devastation. And he's right, although it's a small comfort. Carlisle may yet see his end, and the options are none too pleasant ones.
Loved the connection to your regular characters. Do him proud, Jason. And I have to assume that this is another Jess he is referring to? So the orphan's name is even more meaningful.
Author's Response: Yup, a different Jess. I mentioned it in the story "Grown" that Jason named the blue alien orphan after his mother (Rachael) and sister (Jessica) who were both killed at the Battle of Sector 001 (Star Trek: First Contact).
Date: 06 Jun 2014 09:43 Title: Chapter 3
Ok, that was intense. The Carlisle scene especially was a real heart-breaker - you did an absolutely amazing job describing not only his emotional state but also the physical scene: I could picture this guy in his ruined sickbay, the hole into space ripped into the wall... Fantastic job. I know this isn't going to end well, but how badly exactly is it going to go... Can't wait to see how this ends!
Author's Response: Thank you
Date: 06 Jun 2014 09:39 Title: Chapter 2
Man, what a great chapter. Again, really loved the nods back to the timeline, but you have done a fantastic job of creating some truly compelling original characters to inhabit this era, as well as setting them up for some major dramatic action to come. Loved the character Bronislaw! Great job, TS!
Date: 05 Jun 2014 14:48 Title: Chapter 2
Oh, yay! Carlisle's gotta be related to Jason and Jessiy! And I love how he kind of missteps a little there (e. g. which one is Hawkeye). I see Peter Dinklage as Bronislaw - angry and war-weary but also incredibly competent.
Ready for more, please. :)
Author's Response: Yup! The relation should be revealed next chapter...I promise it doesn't really play a LARGE part. Much of this story I'm using notes from my own Andoria story (as in the ships that were present) so there was going to be at least a few characters that would crossover. As for Peter Dinklage - you are right on the money. He absolutely is who I pictured as "Too Tall." Not necessarily angry - he's supposed to be a very laid back guy - but definitely war-weary in this timeline. Glad you pictured him too!!
Date: 04 Jun 2014 19:59 Title: Chapter 1
Ooh nice! You did a great job of creating the Council scene, as well as the spy in their midst. I liked the little nods to The Fall timeline I sent you, notably the separation of the Federation in two. Great job!
Date: 04 Jun 2014 15:20 Title: Chapter 1
Oh, a spy in the chamber! And certainly not too hard to hide, given the fractious nature of things. This promises to be great!