Date: 19 May 2014 05:28 Title: Chapter 1
I suddenly found myself wishing the Federation equivalent of Detectives Benson and Stabler would bust in and stop them from making off with her. The poor little thing. This story was nicely done. I'm holding out hope that she can escape before she's hurt too badly.
Author's Response: Thank you for reading, RJ. The comment about Benson and Stabler made me laugh. It does seem that they are needed at times, doesn't it? There is more to Barin's story, which is not yet told, so I can't make promises.
Date: 19 May 2014 04:55 Title: Chapter 1
Yowch! I have inside information - which I won't give away here - as to Barin's fate. Truly a shocking, scary piece, and surely every parent's worst nightmare.
Author's Response: Thanks for reading, LBD, and the week will likely end right about the time that your inside information takes place, but in a different scene. Not sure yet, though. Still hammering out details.
Date: 19 May 2014 04:20 Title: Chapter 1
WOW. What a powerful piece you've got here. Very haunting. I hope you expand on it. I'd like to see where it goes!
Author's Response: Thank you, zeusfluff. The whole week's stories will be about Barin, but as to whether I expand on this one or not, I don't know yet. We'll have to see.
Date: 19 May 2014 03:52 Title: Chapter 1
Was it a dream or reality? There in lies the question. That was some hard hitting stuff and certainly is a nasty thought: no one would want to even think about having their child taken away like that. Barin's feelings and movements were well done.
I'm curious to see where this goes.
Author's Response: Thank you for reading, TF. I would argue that some of the worst dreams we have stem from our reality. As to whether this one was the reality or not, that will be answered as the week progresses, hopefully.
Date: 19 May 2014 03:52 Title: Chapter 1
Wow. That was extraordinarily well-drawn and disturbing. Heartbreaking, really.
Author's Response: Thank you, kes. The treatment of the Orion slave girls always bugged me a bit.
Date: 19 May 2014 03:41 Title: Chapter 1
My God, that's quite a grabber of a first entry. Gripping stuff!
Author's Response: Thank you, Jespah. Glad you found it so.