Date: 18 May 2014 23:05 Title: Chapter 1
You and Falsebill both! This is awesome, seeing more of the recent updates to STO here! And very well done, especially the parallel you drew between the Japanese and American conflict, and the Bajorans and Cardassians. I can't wait to see more of this!!
Author's Response: Thank you Templar! This is going into far more serious territory than I originally imagined it and I hope I can pull it off. Once the parallel presented itself I grabbed it and ran. I hope to keep the theme up throughout the coming days' additions.
Date: 18 May 2014 21:24 Title: Chapter 1
I'm strictly a TOS girl, so didn't quite understand what all the hype was about, but a quick spin through Memory Alpha brought everything into sharp focus. It'll be interesting to see where you take this, and whether all the different species will be able to come together or if their differences and unique racial prejudices and mistrust of one another will get in the way. Nice start.
Author's Response: Thank you LBD! I think I'm going to hunt for a synopsis of the in-game episode I've made this a prelude to and post it at the end, that way anyone who is interested and hasn't played the game can find out the ultimate ending.
Date: 18 May 2014 20:39 Title: Chapter 1
Ah, Species 8472. They will no doubt make this a very interesting meeting aboard the ship. Love the observations on propaganda and the way bad blood tends to linger for longer than most people would guess. I see there being issues in the future for these delegations.
Author's Response: Thanks! I think I'm going to learn a lot from this experience. Crafting a prelude story on such a small scale, with such clear advancement from day to day, has been fun and educational.
Date: 18 May 2014 20:32 Title: Chapter 1
Ah species 8472. Nicely handled, and rightfully so that security of the Pathfinder be on their toes. The Undine can be a tricky species.
The only thing that I would recommend is maybe using a different font. I have really good eyes, but 'typewriter font' is harder to read when your eyes are tired, and because it smaller.
Other than that, great story.
Author's Response: Thank ya zeusfluff! The font issue has been corrected. I should probably go back and change it in my other stories as well.
Date: 18 May 2014 18:23 Title: Chapter 1
Oooh, 8472. Looking forward to seeing what you do with them. Voyager mishandled them terribly, but given the bare facts from canon, we know they are formidable enemies.
As an aside, the font you chose made this really difficult for me to read. I'm just saying this as a reader, NOT as a mod. If you picked a san serif font it would be a lot simpler to read, at least for me.
Author's Response: Sorry about that kes! I've changed it to Verdana and I'll be using that from here on out, I'll also go back and "retrofit" my existing stuff with it. I keep forgetting that what shows up fine on my screen doesn't show up fine on everyone elses!
Date: 18 May 2014 17:45 Title: Chapter 1
A good, ominous beginning. Tanaka wants everything to go well, but isn't hedging his bets by any means. Keeping people separate enough to not have to look at each other if they don't want to, but not actively separating them so that they can mingle if the fates allow, is a great strategy.
I loved his casually integrated crew, the Xindi primate (I love the Xindi), the Andorian, plus Tanaka's own background is outlined with a few quick brush strokes. Plus his ancestor's continuing resentment, which he fears is still lingering with the Bajorans and the Cardassians under his watch. Then the Deferi seem to be a kind of wild card; I take it that they're kind of the mediators in the group?
And then, eek, the Undine. This promises a wild ride.
Author's Response: The Deferi are.. probably the most frustrating species I've ever seen in any level of Star Trek canon, with the exception of the Pakleds. They won't do anything unless it's in "balance", meaning all sides have to completely agree and be working in unison. They wouldn't even lift a finger to save themselves in the face of both the Breen and the Borg in-game, instead they let the Federation and Klingon Empire come in and solve the problem for them.. all while griping that both entities "aren't in balance." Well, that's what I took away from that mission arc anyway, and the later episode series they were involved in that centered around Bajor and the Dominion fleet that got lost in the wormhole. The Xindi are so rarely explored, so I thought why not toss one in Starfleet? :D We know they join the Federation eventually.
Date: 18 May 2014 17:39 Title: Chapter 1
Whoah. Species 8472. With the pacing and gentle introduction to the STO universe I forgot about their involvement in its canon. So that last line is a kicker. Nicely played. One is now imagining all sorts of problems and difficulties ahead. As if trying to keep peace between Bajor and Cardassia was not enough in and of itself. Very promising premise here. Looking forward to more. Lieutenant Ikari Tanaka makes an immediate impression.
Author's Response: Thank you! Species 8472 has taken the spotlight in STO with this last update and the featured episode that came with it was perfect for the initial idea I had to be used as a lead in. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Date: 18 May 2014 16:27 Title: Chapter 1
Nice STO piece set on the Pathfinder, yes I can understand the Ikari Tanaka worry about the Cardassian and the Bajor being onboard while the Undine are looking to start fights.
Good start to your TToT ficlets. looking forward to the others.
Author's Response: Thanks FalseBill!
Date: 18 May 2014 15:07 Title: Chapter 1
Ooh, ominous! :)
A great start, you captured your main character well, as well as the high stakes involved. I like how you have managed to give some context for the STO timeline without overwhelming us, and a nice touch to include a Xindi in the ship's crew.
A good beginning, look forward to more!
Author's Response: I like to "learn things as I go" and really hate putting it all up front. I used to write that way and it made things a lot more.. drawn out.. at the start than it needed to be. It made my own stuff very difficult for me to read. So, I've been trying to adapt my writing style to drop pieces of the puzzle as it advances so that at the end the reader has the full picture instead of trying to give him the full picture at the start. I'm glad you liked it and I hope you enjoy what's coming!
Date: 18 May 2014 13:33 Title: Chapter 1
Oh, boy, talk about a potential firestorm. You sure know how to write into a cliffhanger, heavens. I saw the 8274 and went, "Oh, crap!" Looking forward to seeing what comes next!
Author's Response: I have to admit.. I'm a fanboy for the cliffhanger. :P I hope you enjoy what's to come!