Date: 10 Nov 2013 04:00 Title: Chapter 2
This was an interesting introspective chapter. Enlightening to see how this possession of the katra is influencing both T'Pol and Trip.
Some nice attention to detail in here, too. I loved the line about the foghorn; a subtle reminder that they are in SF without coming right out and saying it. The fact that the temperature is too cold for T'Pol, and Trip is remembering things about Vulcan he couldn't possibly know. Very deft and gentle handling of these delicate issues that add to the poignancy.
Date: 10 Nov 2013 03:48 Title: Chapter 1
Again, I like the mirroring of the original. Alike but not quite. Definitely as it should have happened for this ship and crew.
The window into T'Pol's mind was fascinating; a glimpse we never had of Spock in the original. I daresay his thoughts would have been similar, but certainly more disrupted with McCoy's overly-emotional personality gumming up the works. ;-)
Date: 10 Nov 2013 03:37 Title: Prologue
Why is it that this scene always hurts, whether the original, the AOS version, or the one you've depicted here? That's definitely a compliment; it evokes all the anguish, sorrow, sacrifice and camaraderie of the original.
Date: 01 Nov 2013 20:29 Title: Chapter 5
Oh Mac...that was absolutely amazing.
I was a bit lost at first, so I think I will have to read the preceding story, but you did a great job filling in the details.
You'll notice I didn't stop and leave reviews on each chapter. That's because I didn't stop; you captivated me and held my attention until I could finish the story. That is the making of a great adventure. Everything seemed perfectly in character, the voices were all correct, the actions wonderful. I love the bridging the gap you did, bringing in the Daedalus-classes as well as altering Enterprise's registry from NX to NCC post-Romulan war. I half expected some brand-new off the line Constitution to roll-up after the Enterprise, but it was great to see the adherence to the timeline.
Also loved the cameo of Sarek; it offers a incredible bit of history and insight to the man to why he would be so knowledgeable on the subject of the katra, and why he would be so desperate to get Kirk to go through this same scenario.
This story seems like it would fit perfectly in the "missing years" between Terra Prime and These Are the Voyages. Well done; this was another rocking answer to the challenge.
Author's Response: Far too generous in your praise Temp though I am most appreciative of it :)
Here's where it gets tricky. For a couple of years now I've been doing a post-Terra Prime series of ENT stories, if the show had not been cancelled kind of thing and for a while it's been using ideas that Season 5 might've used. One I'm sure was ENT getting an NCC registry and the Romulan War of course.
I tend to ignore These are the Voyages...trouble is the Into Darkness version though half done doesn't seem to fit into what I have (Tiberius would be in a Season 7 story yet to write, the planned Shatner guest spot that never was)...so I guess these ENT bits happen not only post-UFP founding but in some neverworld...
...it's kind of confusing to me actually :) but my thanks. Maybe we'll get a Star Trek ENT III soon :)
Date: 29 Oct 2013 00:04 Title: Chapter 5
Bitter sweet ending you manage to capture the moment from the end of STIII and yet keep it fully in the feel of the Enterprise, I salute you sir top job.
A fully enjoyable read and it will be interesting to see how the adventure continues.
Love the second star to the right line and lets find somewhere cool line.
Date: 29 Oct 2013 00:01 Title: Chapter 4
I did wonder which ship was pursuing and how that would fit into this alter timeline, Thou I’m surprise the Vulcan defence fleet didn’t have words to say about a guest been fired upon in their space, I guess that was part of T’Pau disagreement with them doing it, she wouldn’t stop them nor help them.
Still I like the use of the codes to sent the Excalibur landing party away on the ruins of the Enterprise without killing them.
Using Sarek as the replacement for the high priestess of STIII, feels right and in keeping with this universe as you’ve set it up.
Another excellent chapter – but why do I fear the outcome of the final chapter.
Date: 28 Oct 2013 23:52 Title: Chapter 3
Do like that Archer used him fame and rank to get past the ensign on the door, and Trip reaction to finding out why he was right, was well judge change on McCoy’s version.
Like the quick beam out, clearly Starfleet hasn’t invested in transporters jammer yet for the Psych ward.
Do like that you used the named Daedalus class ships from TOS/TNG/DS9 stories as the more advance ship trying to stop the old lady escaped.
The scene with T’Pol tempering her joy and talking with trip as their memories start to merge and his body burns up was a nice little extra scene that felt right for Enterprise setting.
Date: 28 Oct 2013 23:44 Title: Chapter 2
So Archer room is the scene for the review of T’pol last moments as Soval helps to see if T’Pol has indeed put her Katra into Trip (why does that read so wrong?).
I like you’ve kept that the Vulcans are still trying to resolve the fact from fiction after T’Pau rise to authority.
Why do I think they won’t have an uneventful journey? Still archer and Phlox going a jail breaking I’m shock ;)
Do like that T’pol is finding inhabitant trip body an interesting experience.
I also do like that Tiberius from one Mirror see the value of T’Pol in making Spock his best supporting man.
Still wonderful scene as Trip can’t work out why he pre-occupied with Vulcan.
Date: 28 Oct 2013 23:35 Title: Chapter 1
Nice scene with Phlox and Archer in the 602 club.
Archer moping mourning is nicely contrast with Phlox optimistic view of life.
Did a good job of describing how tucker act odd while in the arts centre.
Was a nice touch to have Archer recall about the katra and then suspect that Tucker might have T’pol’s katra inside him.
Again was a nice touch as T’Pol katra comes to grips with where it at and Tucker experience a vision of T’Pol as the nurse/doctor knock him out.
Good re-imagine of the original material. I shall read on and hope that the rest is as good.
Date: 28 Oct 2013 23:26 Title: Prologue
T’Pol NO!!!
Still Mackenzie it’s amazing how touching you’ve managed to make that short scene, you able to mirror the original and still capture that pain of a heroes sacrifice.
Date: 28 Oct 2013 21:22 Title: Chapter 5
... and so it does!
Well done, and respectful to both sides of canon.
Author's Response: thanks Jespah.
Date: 28 Oct 2013 21:20 Title: Chapter 4
I like how Sarek is a descendant of Solkar. Good little Easter eggs in this story.
Date: 28 Oct 2013 21:14 Title: Chapter 3
... and time's a-wastin'. Loved Captain Fontana.
Date: 28 Oct 2013 21:08 Title: Chapter 2
There are little bits of subtle possession in here, nicely done.
Date: 28 Oct 2013 21:03 Title: Chapter 1
Well, they are bonded. It's only, dare I say, logical.
Date: 28 Oct 2013 21:00 Title: Prologue
An auspicious beginning -- let's see what happens!