Date: 08 Sep 2013 18:23 Title: Chapter One: Transition
I was please to see that this follow up story to your original Agamemnon story exists and I do hope you’ll find time after your next full speed ahead novel to do more.
While the writing is a bit jumpy for more liking I note the story age and your previous comments in the Agamemnon response and so I wouldn’t count it against the story.
Using t’Aimne personnel log from the end of the original story to open this is a good idea as it establishes no time has pass between the two stories. Plus t’Aimne thoughts and feelings as she looks around the Starfleet quarters and compares it to what she would get on a Romulan ship. I have to agree with her that Richard skill with spoken Romulan is a little to good for his explanation.
The new officers seem to be setting the scene for more story in the future, as the doctor especially seems to be a walk on part, though the spaceport security been talking into moving medical supplies without the right paperwork, didn’t seem to sit right for me. I wonder if this is going to come back and force a certain Ensign to drink his future meals?
Jesara reaction to the Romulan on the bridge felt at first right, but on reflection shouldn’t someone of told her there was a Romulan exchange officer onboard before she assume her post?
Still enjoyable read, more please?
Date: 23 Aug 2013 03:37 Title: Chapter One: Transition
So far, so good.
I notice you have to recap the earlier story, and I have had to do it, and, honestly, it's sometimes the kind of exposition that has got to get out there but it can be difficult to make it look good. But you got it out there quickly, and now it's done.
Similarly to the previous story, a lot of the action is taking place in a more expository fashion.
I like how Low handled the foul-up; that was good thinking on his part. And Jesara, James is right; it's best for her to be on high alert but he could have avoided the incident by keeping her better informed. He's also right to give her the bit of extra work to do, and to keep it off the record.
[Report This]Date: 26 Jun 2009 19:23 Title: Chapter One: Transition
So, "Hank" got his fourth pip after all. But, it seems like he knew that was just about all he could muster and retired, leaving command of the Agamemnon to newly promoted Commander James.
I think this initial chapter is appropriately titled, as it does cover the transitions from one Captain to another, from one crew to another. It also gives us a glimpse of what it would be like on a starship without such lengthy crew assignments based on tours of duty.
I can't wait to find out what awaits our crew at Deep Space 3 and beyond!
Date: 18 Jun 2009 19:42 Title: Chapter One: Transition
This is quite good. I had a hard time telling what era it takes place in. next Generation seems right but there's reference to the Constellation and Excelsior classes in regards to the Apollo-class age that I didn't quite get. Still, interesting and added to favs so I can follow along.
Author's Response:
Well the Stardate is in the 53000s, so it's beyond Voyager, even. :)
Thanks for reading.
-- MDg