Date: 02 Sep 2012 10:06 Title: Chapter Two
This new clocking device sounds interesting but I'm sure I've come across the holographic concept before somewhere. May not have been in Trek canon, I don't remember.
Leone comes across as very cold and abrupt here. I'm not sure if that is her normal admiral command mode or if perhaps she is overcompensating for her emotional outbreak earlier.
I like the addition of Schweinfurt to the crew. His nickname and his unreciprocated romantic feelings towards Tei add some of your trademark comedic elements to this otherwise quite serious tale.
Date: 01 Sep 2012 15:23 Title: Chapter One
The other question to ask is; was Pava ever alright to begin with? Oh well, that's a question for somebody else to solve.
A sad but poignant memorial service. As expected the death of Ariel is hitting Leone especially hard. For all her toughness and professionalism, this is not something she can handle easily.
I like the dynamic between Kircheis and her XO, by the way. She may not be particularly street smart but her loyalty is impressive.
Date: 26 Aug 2012 16:01 Title: Prologue
Not heavy on details, the prologue never the less firmly establishes a great conflict as our presumed protagonist must choose between loyalty to family or state. The decision is going to have far-reaching implications I'm sure and I can't wait finding out what familiar faces will make an appearance in this tale.
Date: 26 Aug 2012 01:10 Title: Prologue
A moody and grim beginning, promising danger set against the backdrop of the autocratic Romulan state.
People will doubtless bleed before this tale is done…