Date: 30 May 2013 12:11 Title: Chapter 5
I find it fascinating that Sheilagh and Tom can dream so soundly as Boris performs all of this brain surgery and adding implants to their brains. You would think -- as a sub-conscious defence mechanism -- that Sheilagh and Tom would have rather disturbed dreams?
Date: 30 May 2013 12:04 Title: Chapter 4
So we have some weird characters here, and I'm figuring they would be more familiar if I had read the first story of the HG Wells series, I am wondering though if this story suffers from too many characters to the point were some of them lose focus to the reader's mind.
But I'll give you credit for one thing though; this is a strange story with some weird characters in a very weird universe!
Author's Response:
I try to write stories so that they can more or less stand alone - but if you do want to look back, the story is A Long, Long Time Ago.
Date: 30 May 2013 11:46 Title: Chapter 3
So that's why Carmen hired Marisol, one part for her talent as a doctor and the other part for certain... perks...
These temporal agents and their senior staff sure are strange people!
Date: 30 May 2013 11:37 Title: Chapter 2
Fascinating stuff about the biological and genetic alterations a temporal agent must go through! You have thought it through giving how Richard explained about fingerprints and all! So -- despite there being a lot of dialogue -- this is so far a rather good story!
Author's Response:
Thank you - I'll post a response at the end, as I can see you wrote a ton of reviews, but I do want to thank you right now for giving my story your time and attention!
Date: 30 May 2013 11:24 Title: Chapter 1
So Daniels here is a temporal agent, an augment (I never realised that when I watched the first two-thirds of ENT) and in his off-duty time wishes he got some action! I like his parents though, they go fer it like rabbits!