Date: 27 Mar 2015 22:21 Title: CRASH
OUCH!!! But I kind of like how they used jokes to keep from totally freaking out.
"DON"T MAKE ME LAUGH!"
Date: 27 Mar 2015 22:14 Title: Shand's Best Friend
The dog sheds, the guinea pig smells, and the snake terrifies him, but the tarantula is cute. I wonder how he would have reacted to a tribble.
Date: 27 Mar 2015 22:08 Title: Sanjay Maru
Overall I like, but I think Ross and Mystery Man need a remedial course in Kirk Appreciation.
Date: 31 May 2014 11:51 Title: Sanjay Maru
Another great twist on the no-win scenario and it makes sense to be that a late 24th Century Cadet like Sanjay would try to copy Kirk's Corbomite maneuver.
Unlike Admiral Ross I found the choice of the miracle material name ‘Kirkium’ appropriate as it is a good flag to most readers what going on but I did feel perhaps Ross should acknowledge that at least Sanjay was up to date his historical tactics knowledge.
As always the story is well set out and thus easy to read aid by the story structure follows in a logical order.
I was left a bit puzzled by Ross conversation with the unseen voices as it didn’t seem an appropriate way to discuss the cadet actions but I guess that was done for the sake of aiding the story narrative.
All in all a good and fun read.
Date: 30 May 2014 15:11 Title: The Interrogation
The Interrogation was a different story and the fun you had writing it show through.
I can see why Command M’Benga had a problem trusting the Ferengi interrogation to Torres and Shandahat are certainly crazy enough to carry off the ruse that they going to eat the Ferengi but I like how you start off slow by the field book and then just up the level each time the Ferengi try to hide behind his rights.
I never thought I read a trek fanfic where the line “Do you think Ferengis taste like chicken?” would be used.
Did like the fake scene with the Spider in the bar and how you put another nod into the conversation to show they faking it but I can see why under pressure the Ferengi would buy the story.
Good ending scene as Mitchell and Carol discuss the effect of threatening to barbeque Johx on getting a confession.
Author's Response: Thanx. This is one of my favorites.
Date: 30 May 2014 00:27 Title: Do the Math
Oh, deeply dark. I liked this. It felt very threatening and clearly the voice of a vengeful figure. The cold hard math of the opening was a thrilling little statement, neat tie to the title and served exactly up the chilling cold nature of the short piece. Very effective.
Date: 29 May 2014 23:43 Title: The Interrogation
This was so fun to read. Again, with these two it is always a trip and who doesn't enjoy comedy cop duo buddies doing their best unnerving and effective interrogations. Fingerlickin' good.
Date: 29 May 2014 19:12 Title: Shand's Best Friend
Gloriously funny, as it usually is when it comes to your Torres and Shand. Seems they were a comedy duo from the very beginning in their cadet dorms. I mean their partnership is an odd one in many ways and this exemplifies it - but its that way because they are both rather peculiar in their own ways. Joe as cadet deciding he wants a pet and rushing out (repeatedly) to get one. Then Shand and his funny ways of thumbs downing the pets (especially the snake) only to turn around and LIKE the tarantula. Ibbie jibbies. gah. Anyway, a heck of a funny bit.
Date: 29 May 2014 14:45 Title: Shand's Best Friend
Well Mistral that was an entertaining little tale.
It did make sense for the Andorian Shand to like Sarah the Tarantula of all the foul Terran animals that Joe brought home as a trial.
You did a good job of introducing readers to the two characters and showing their respected characters by picking up Joe worries about graduating and Shand comment on his Carousing all hours.
While Shand workaholic studying is pick out by what he’s doing each time Joe does bring a new candidate pet home.
I also get the feeling rightly or wrongly from his statement of dislike of the dog that he a bit OCD about tidiness if he bothered by the fur and crumbs. Plus I’m sure a good house trained dog doesn’t go everywhere. Also his major complaint about Cats being they don’t obey orders clear shows a tendency for a potential control freak.
Still I full agree with Shand for his reasons for rejecting the rodent option
Nice to see even the harden Andorian want nothing to do with the Snake, it help break the character over seriousness and keep the humour of the story going. Shand must have been loud to get through a supposedly sound proof door.
Did like that Shand found Sarah cute, it was a great way to mellow the character and by highlighting Joe uneasy about proposing it and the freak out Cadets in the hall way, you able to play on the underlying oddity of Human behaviour and how to an alien they might see weird double standards.
So great story idea, well executed and enjoyable read.
Date: 26 May 2014 03:26 Title: In The Pit
Oh wow! Damian saw his alternate version of himself. An interesting read you have here Mistral.
Thanks for sharing this. :)
Date: 22 Apr 2014 13:50 Title: Sanjay Maru
Sanjay! You found the loophole! But truly, why not use all advantages? When in a real situation such as that, you would not be playing nice.
Pity they ship him off to the boonies! Well done.
Date: 08 Dec 2013 21:35 Title: Do the Math
Don't know anything about this universe but this read as raw and visceral in spite of that. The universal hurt we all experience at losing someone close to us, and at the irrational but oh-so predictable need for revenge, hoping that in some small way it will serve to diminish the hurt, even a little.
Chilling and haunting, as well as disturbing, but so true to human nature.
Date: 04 Nov 2013 19:34 Title: The Lost Kingdom
A very imaginative take on a ghost story, the idea of Walt Disney being found in the future tickles. Very good story.
Date: 02 Sep 2013 19:59 Title: Do the Math
Wow, I thought I was dark. That was very disturbing in a very small space. Most excellent.
Date: 01 Sep 2013 17:54 Title: Do the Math
This is absolutely gorgeous. Jerix threw me big style in the story, I thought he was going to be doing something undercover, but then it turned out he was just shattered by what happened at Jupiter Station. And man, you do such a gorgeous job here getting into the heart of why.
Date: 01 Sep 2013 15:49 Title: Do the Math
Oh, man, this chilled me.
It doesn't help that it's thundering outside (did you arrange that for when I'd be reading this?!?!?). ;)
Bravo!
Date: 01 Sep 2013 13:59 Title: Do the Math
Cold maths and the harsh truth of mathematics not sure the whole story, as I'm not up to speed with this verse but in 190 words you paint a picture and set the scene well.
Date: 01 Sep 2013 12:37 Title: Do the Math
Wow that is...chilling. And pretty darn similar to SLWalker's Scotty in "Echoes, Silence, Patience, and Grace," as far as knowing how to fix things and destroy them, and having that desire to do both. I fear this might be another universe I need to go wade into to get a better understanding for what happened to reach this point, but I can definitely see the hatred dripping from every word in this short piece. Chilling, for sure.
Date: 24 Aug 2013 02:35 Title: A Loaf of Bread, A Jug of Wine
Wow. That was cold and abrupt! It makes me wonder more about their backstory, too. How did they meet, how did they end up there?
Date: 24 Aug 2013 02:31 Title: The Lost Kingdom
That has to be one of the most surreal crossover stories ever. I love how you played it straight with Sanjay there, too. As this were another run of the mill scientific anamoly there. And in a way, it was.
Date: 24 Aug 2013 00:30 Title: Shand's Best Friend
That was certainly an entertaining little story. And apparently Andorian's really dig spiders. Who knew?
Date: 21 Aug 2013 10:33 Title: Shand's Best Friend
Ha! I love it. Of course Shand would not want any of the actual cute critters and instead instantly bond with a giant, oogie spider. Terrific!
Author's Response: Thank you!
Date: 21 Aug 2013 04:35 Title: The Interrogation
Oh my God. So that is the story. And it is an awesome story. Because those two are just about nuts enough to convince someone that they'd resort to that.
Author's Response: You mean you just read this? Wow. Thanks for the review!
Date: 21 Aug 2013 03:51 Title: USS Seleya - Corkscrewed
Well, that is a dark ending and a ton of dead and lost, but it was one heck of a riproaring adventure! I'm glad I read it, it was a lot of fun and had more than a few clever, badass moments. I hope someday you return to them, they're definitely a worthy crew.
Author's Response: Thank you, SL. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Now I have to go back and read it to figure out which chapters your comments pertain to. (Although I know which ones about Scotty, and Picard's speech-some of my favorite moments in this story.)
Date: 21 Aug 2013 03:42 Title: USS Seleya - Corkscrewed
Holy shit. I was hoping Jerix had been working for the cause of good, but alas. Even so, the Excelsior and her sacrifice wad quite a stroke of exceptionally badass and genius and no wonder such an incendiary answer came from the hands of Montgomery Scott, his idea or no. I just hope Sanjay and Seleya make it good!