Reviewer: SLWalker Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 May 2013 03:36 Title: Sunset

Hank is decidedly adorable in first person. I say this with an admitted bias, but his infatuation with Bethany rings loud and clear. I saw a few points you could clean up, and I think you could have maybe gotten deeper into his head, but where you did go is quite good. I love how he hesitates about going off into space; it really is a big leap, and not having her there will obviously be hard for him.

The ending is sentimental and romantic and so damn Hank Harrison.

Reviewer: Lil black dog Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Sep 2011 00:56 Title: Sunset

Aww - that was inexpressibly sweet.  And sad, melancholy and heart-wrenching all at the same time.  I've had my first introduction to Hank and Bethany in the free writes, so this additional glimpse into their lives is so enlightening, especially at the dawn of their relationship.  I'm glad to know Hank's heartache will be short-lived. ;-)

I like your take, too on how Hank sees himself after graduating from the Academy - not as a trained professional, but as the 'new kid.'  I never really thought of it that way, but that's really how it is - although theoretical training and actual experience are two totally different things. ;-)  I can see though, where it would be hard to go from a senior - someone who has mentored cadets junior to him - to the bottom of the totem pole. ;-)  A very effective piece that leaves me wanting to delve deeper into the history of these two.

Author's Response:

Thanks LBD, I'm glad you enjoyed the story. I was just testing the waters with some things here, but the topic is very much one I had hoped would strike a chord with people. Your reveiw is much appreciated :)