Reviewer: jespah Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Sep 2011 21:29 Title: Bringing Down the Baron

Ah! What a ride!

I have personally found it difficult to write battles. Personal fights are one thing, as there are expressions, grunts, often speech and the like. But battles seem to require more visuals.

But I truly think you pulled this off. The sounds of the battle, the chatter over the comm system, the image and then the vision of the brother - and you can't tell whether he's dead or alive (wait, wait, don't tell me!), it all locks the reader in.

It was a very Top Gun story, and I mean that in the best of ways, in terms of a truly exciting battle scene and not weird Tom Cruise or bad 80s music.

Author's Response: I learned rather quickly in writing Laughing Sawfish that writing massive battles is exceedingly difficult. ;) But yeah, watching Battlestar Galactica has taught me that you can pull off quite a bit of action just within the cockpit of a fighter.