Date: 30 Sep 2014 01:46 Title: Chapter 9: Thin Air
Icheb is going to lecture her SO hard later... You have done a great job at conveying Icheb and Maren's emotional states throughout this piece. Well done!
Date: 21 Sep 2014 18:43 Title: Chapter 9: Thin Air
Well Maren has well and truly hit the crunch and you continue to turn the screws as the oxygen runs out on her. Still the hypoxemia scare up the ante well and then the collapse moment and the watching officers response remain true to form.
Another fine chapter in this tale.
Date: 20 Sep 2014 17:19 Title: Chapter 9: Thin Air
Home stretch with the finish line in sight. It's all or nothing time. Unfortunately for Maren, nothing could mean death or serious injury.
Date: 20 Sep 2014 01:53 Title: Chapter 9: Thin Air
WHOA. Holy crap, she's running in the frozen wasteland! Tense scene; like the audio alerts being disabled by Maren (seems to be SOP for Starfleet in the situation) and Schmidt continues to be a dick. I hope he gets grilled for this.
Date: 19 Sep 2014 01:45 Title: Chapter 9: Thin Air
Ah - yeah - Schmidt is gonna get his ass handed to him on a plate.