Date: 30 Sep 2014 01:20 Title: Chapter 5: Sunrise, Sunset
It's adorable to me that Icheb finds Maren to be perfect; and that he is even more attracted to her upon realizing that she has flaws. I feel bad to her for a few reasons, most notably because she has to sleep alone while Icheb is regenerating.
Throughout the chapters thus far, you've really made a good point of considering the details of the situation: how each persons unique circumstances and interests shape their lives in a more than superficial level.
Date: 20 Sep 2014 16:30 Title: Chapter 5: Sunrise, Sunset
Maren O'Conner! Here I thouht you had bee raised in a good Christian home. And now to hear you swear like that. She probably gets that from JQ. And I guess the lesson here is, don't mess with Starfleet Academy.
Date: 16 Sep 2014 20:12 Title: Chapter 5: Sunrise, Sunset
Oh Maren... My wife is a perfectionist, so I totally understand where this is coming from, but at the same time... WTF! Great job as usual of getting into the mindset of your characters, of showing us the tortured paths their thoughts must take. The scene with the Denobulan was nicely done as well. On to the next chapter...
Date: 16 Sep 2014 15:54 Title: Chapter 5: Sunrise, Sunset
Oh, Maren. You're going to go out in a frozen blaze of glory, huh? Can't blame you. The way they set up the test does make it sadistic, in the truest sense of the word. I liked the introduction of Klaris (Denobulan's FTW), hope to see him again in the future.
I wonder if Starfleet is going to punish Schmidt and his brood for this ... Icheb knows Janeway. She could be convinced to do something I'm sure.
Date: 15 Sep 2014 23:53 Title: Chapter 5: Sunrise, Sunset
Uh, oh. Maren, this is how people die.
Date: 15 Sep 2014 23:34 Title: Chapter 5: Sunrise, Sunset
What’s wrong with Tellarite food precisely? lol
Still you do to give Icheb a inbuilt urge to bend and break the rules which does seem hardwire into him, then again that what he was made to do to the borg so perhaps I shouldn’t be surprised. Still I do wonder what JQ will make of the Icheb breakfast chat.
Well good to see Maren realizing that she needs to use the EV suit and her reaction to opening the door and see just how cold it really is outside was sadistic funny.
Another well crafted chapter and you continue to make your main characters interesting to follow.
Good work as usually Kes7.