Date: 11 Jun 2014 01:00 Title: Chapter 5
Damn. Isn't it telling that both sides believe the other is foresaking Andoria here. The bitter ugly truth is that there is really no other choice. Andoria has fallen. It isn't Starfleet foresaking them. It isn't a cowardly Andorian people fleeing. It is the harsh reality of a singularly minded Dominion seeking a total victory. It's reaching a crescendo here. I love the build up. The chaos. The unclean nature of everything. The already ugly recriminations and fault laying as Andoria falls. And the fact that brave people are making a desperate stand. (I want to picture some of my Border Dogs doing their bit there too, holidng the line). If this were onscreen, now would be the time for epic soaring music piece.
Author's Response: That's a really good point...and now you've got me mad I didn't ask you for some Border Dogs input. lol...I'm sure a few were in there, definitely. Like...yeah, that ship. Right there. No, the one on the left. Your OTHER left...
Date: 10 Jun 2014 19:11 Title: Chapter 5
And a defence mission turns into a rescue mission... Harsh but understandable here from the Andorian minister, and Bronislaw is a brave man for obeying that order, knowing what it may cost his people. A truly thrilling finale here, you've done a fantastic job capturing the darkness of the Fall!
Date: 08 Jun 2014 12:29 Title: Chapter 5
Divide they fall.
Another good chapter well done.
Date: 08 Jun 2014 03:54 Title: Chapter 5
Great nod to canon - the Kumari was Shran's ship, but I'm sure you knew that. Awful and believable, this is a panicked evacuation, not the orderly nonsense we always seemed to see on the screen. People would not be behaving rationally or calmly. What you're showing is far more realistic.