Date: 13 Jun 2014 23:14 Title: Chapter 1
Dissension among the ranks. I've always suspected that some members of the Federation felt this way, but neat to see it vocalized here. And leave it to the Dominion to take advantage of this, driving a wedge into a small fissure which is sure to open into a huge rift.
Date: 11 Jun 2014 00:32 Title: Chapter 1
oooh. Terrific window in time to take a peek into. We see clearly, that the growing threat of the Dominion worked here in so many ways to undermine the Federation. Firstly, they used their skills of spying and treachery to great effect to gain important information, but they also make pinpoint decisions about where to strike in order to cause and foster the greatest division within the powers that hold the Federation together. It is a cunning, calculated move by the Dominion. But that's perfectly their character and especially in a universe where they eventually triumph. In many ways actually, it illustrates one fault of canon whereby the Dominion seemed lose some of their bite and ruthless nature in order to facilitate a Starfleet win.
The growing hatred, division and dissension in the chambers is striking and then the choice of ending is sinister and in its own way a shocking reveal. Well played.
Date: 08 Jun 2014 12:17 Title: Chapter 1
Got to say the Andorian has got a fair complaint, Ross should be looking to defend it better.
A traitor on the council, can't say I'm surprised.
Good opening and a fitting Ch1 ending line.
Date: 07 Jun 2014 19:58 Title: Chapter 1
NICE rant by the Andorian. Totally justified, and of course, made all the more chilling and prescient by that final scene.
Date: 04 Jun 2014 19:59 Title: Chapter 1
Ooh nice! You did a great job of creating the Council scene, as well as the spy in their midst. I liked the little nods to The Fall timeline I sent you, notably the separation of the Federation in two. Great job!
Date: 04 Jun 2014 15:20 Title: Chapter 1
Oh, a spy in the chamber! And certainly not too hard to hide, given the fractious nature of things. This promises to be great!