[Report This]Date: 02 Dec 2020 13:23 Title: Chapter Ten - Time Flux
Some excellent word-painting on the opening scene, particularly the description of Maya and the detail of how she is sitting. And now we get to the title scene (run opening credits).
Time travel stories are exceptionally difficult to write for rather obvious reasons. This one appears to be well underway with good reference to the impossibility of the Temporal Prime Directive (for reasons related to the impossibility of the Prime Directive only amplified.) Simply carrying the memory of the future into the past - even if every action could be mimicked changes the past. Just as the mere act of observation impacts the culture being observed.
Another Xylion and Jon Owens and Amaya Donners will meet this Michael Owens and Demara Deen. But to the Xylion, Owens and Donners they left behind, Michael and Demara have vanished forever.
Thanks!! rbs
Author's Response: Thanks for the kind words. This story is now about 15 years older or more, so I went back and re-read some of this myself based on your comments. And you're right, time travel is hard and I probably cheated a little bit here with the established rules. Although you can probably argue that there are no real rules when it comes to time travel. Except, of course, never ever meet your younger self. Back to the Future did teach us that at least.