[Report This]Date: 21 Sep 2020 14:18 Title: Day Four: The Woman in White: II
The rapid fire change of who is in the chair has a cinematic feel - like plenty of scenes from cop dramas. Good for quick plot development and I am a fan of cutting out unnecessary fat.
Thanks!! rbs
Author's Response: I'm sure its a technique I borrowed from film and TV, probably even Trek, where it probably works a bit better than in the written form. But I'm with you, I don't always do it, but I do enjoy a quick pace from time to time.
Date: 08 May 2014 02:40 Title: Day Four: The Woman in White: II
Good grief there are quite a few discrepancies in these accounts causing for further probing. My oh my. Adding up to quite a mystery but where is the motive? My money lies on e fact the array people are the most suss. Did gendarmes figure out a problem or sinister under purpose for the array.
P.S. noticed in this chapter a few spelling or word choice errors that a spellcheck would not catch
Author's Response: Looks like not everyone was feeling the same way about our poor victim. Imagine that. But who had the most to gain from his death? A question Clancy and Nora will have to find an answer to soon.
Date: 13 Jan 2014 21:11 Title: Day Four: The Woman in White: II
I love a good detective story and you have a nice one going on here. The transitions between interview subjects is good and the dialogue is tight. I appreciate the way you let both Nora and Clancy get involved here, making this a true effort in team work (instead of just letting one dominate which happens a lot on TV).
Gedar was a ladies man, huh? Judging by how Nora was eyeing his dead body earlier, he must have been a hunk. I'm wondering if this is just as simple as a scorned lover, but it would be a little TOO simple if it was, IMO.
Author's Response: Clancy is going to be quite essential in this investigation and clearly brings to table expertise Nora is missing. And I think she's warming up to having him around and asking relevant questions. Gedar was a good looking fellow. But yeah, don't count on the simple solution just yet.