[Report This]Date: 17 Sep 2020 13:38 Title: Day Three: The Big Sleep: V
Very intersting moment of vulnerability for the captain and first officer and an unexpected growth moment for their relationship. Also interesting that he considers a broken officer as he describes Nora to be his responsibility.
This does seem to be a very contentious lot compared to the crew I'm fielding, but there is a difference in age. This is a young crew with a lot of personal growth issues to deal with and not a lot of seasoned officers to help them through it or provide the boundaries elders usually provide. Which is common in military service - very much tracks with the way my father described his service in the US Navy (which he said stands for Never Again Volunteer Yourself.)
I also picked up on your reference to JAG in the previous chapter having an investigative role - which also tracks as we both present Star Fleet as not having a military police arm, meaning that JAG would have to fill that role as well.
Thanks!! rbs
Author's Response: Yeah, this is a very different dynamic to Hunter, that's for sure. Michael Owens is not exactly an inexperienced starship captain but he has flaws and blindspots as I think is pretty obvious in this story. Much of this is can be blamed on wartime trauma that all these characters have been through.
Date: 05 May 2014 01:47 Title: Day Three: The Big Sleep: V
Wow. Wow. I did not expect Owens to say that - admit to that. That's ... wow. The man is not sure about trusting Star, yet despite that, he opens to her in a manner to reveal this weakness he has probably even only admitted to himself. It's quite telling of the character of Owens yet for that I did not expect it. He's clearly learning and growing himself. Between the war, the loss of his XO and knowing the pain Nora has and given the other significant changes that have/are happening, Owens is unsure yet solid and commanding. However, we also see he's disturbed by the events, the lack of sleep and the growing fissure between Laas and Star. The scene in his ready room was quite combustive. No one exactly showered themselves with glory in this instance.
Laas is out of line. Things are obviously boiling over and taking a toll on her. She's tough and fierce but sometimes a time comes when it gets to be too much. I like seeing that in character she reacts with anger and force to compensate because that's been her go to way in the past to resolve past problems.
Star is impressive in terms of trying to do her utmost. The fear here is that she is so fervent in wanting to please, change and amend that if she should fail, be dismissed or anything the set back will be collosal and one dreads what course her life would take then.
Author's Response: Owens does lay himself a bit bare here, doesn't he? And you might be right, he may only just have come to this realization himself that he's somehow trying to protect Nora. Loyalty goes both ways. Owens clearly shares her pain and his might be even worse, having lost not just his friend and first officer but also another person very close to him. I think the fact that he felt comfortable enough to be this honest with Star here shows that he really wants to trust her. He's not there yet. But if, in the meantime, she can work wonders on getting Nora in line, I'm sure he'll take that gladly.
Date: 12 Jan 2014 07:07 Title: Day Three: The Big Sleep: V
Well, a compelling scene here plays out. I love the inter-dynamics you have here amongst the crew, you've nailed them, and poor Owens has to play referee which I think every captain -- at some point -- has to play. Well done on this, I loved the pointed barbs and the way you paint the scene.
Sorta like a Judge Judy episode if you'll pardon the comparison. Very enjoyable.
Author's Response: Yeah, I think this had a bit of a courtroom vibe to it. And probably more Judge Judy than Supreme Court, much to Owens' chagrin.