Date: 14 Apr 2013 23:25 Title: Chapter 2
OMG. Straight into the chill factor. Very jawsesian in the feel and set up, quite a skill to give an homage to that and set it in Trek times. And Speilbergian to pull the rug on us like that too.
Date: 17 Mar 2013 02:52 Title: Chapter 2
Man oh - poor Kate. Your attention to detail is great BTW - the fog, the cold water, the currents, the bridge being partially swallowed by the fog.
And this was so tense - great way to set the mood for the rest of the piece.
Date: 05 Mar 2013 08:05 Title: Chapter 2
The dialog is very good in this story. And you do a great job setting the scene!...Gary comes off as a real person here and will be fun to watch where you take him. I can see Gary Lockwood (was that his name) clearing in these scenes in my mind.
Author's Response: thanks, I'm glad Lockwood is coming through. Great actor in so much of what he's done.