Reviewer: Strider Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 May 2013 02:37 Title: Chapter 1 - The Throwback

This is a great beginning. I love how you immediately deal with the mundane details, but don't let us get bogged down in them. The overarching conflict is still there and driving the plot. As a writer I have a terrible time striking that balance, so good job!

Author's Response:

Oh, thank you! This concept (it's canon, but I've stretched it quite a bit) has spawned 4 freakin' books. It was a lot of great  stuff to work with.