
Date: 08 Sep 2020 02:31 Title: Day One: Farewell, My Lovely: III
There are actually two chapters here - a ceremony and a relationship story.
Ceremony is difficult to write. They come off as awkward, overplanned, speechy - but this is actually true to life. Ceremonies are all of those things and they are almost never comfortable, natural affairs. This one has that lifelike awkwardness and spontinaity.
The relation moment is interrupted by misgivings about time travel and alternate timelines - which is prologue considering I've read the other end of this story. And I'm a huge fan of foreshadowing. All of that makes the development of the love story awkward and uncomfortable - but that is also true to life. Most people don't do it smoothly. We're awkward and uncertain in those moments.
Thanks!! rbs
Author's Response: True, sometimes I merge things together when I think it might make sense. Funny story, the foreshadowing in this chapter is entirely organic. I'd love to admit that I had Quantum Divergence already fully planned out when I wrote this, but that is not at all the case. Funny how things work out sometimes.
Date: 18 Mar 2014 01:41 Title: Day One: Farewell, My Lovely: III
Aw man, lots to love and reflect on in this chapter. I mean, to see Donners and Owens begin to get together is a great big Eagle moment. This set up was from way back in book one. It's been quite a journey since. I guess they are growing up and by dent of the war, by dent of their experiences captaining, they are maybe more in a position to make something of their relationship. Equally, both are as like to put their respective ship, crew, duty and career before their happiness - so either one of them has the great potential to scupper things before they even start. As it seemed almost for a moment that Owens had done.
As to Wenera, a lovely goodbye scene. I like the fact we have changes and a passing of the torch moment. All too often, these moments do not get to happen - in canon because of budgetry reasons and contracts ended, etc and in fanfiction, all too often the goodbye is a death knell. So it is charming to see a goodbye - and one that may be an au revoir. Albeit, Wenera is in for an interesting future.
Then there's her replacement. He's already a character. And apart from his own introduction, it is Donner's summation of the doc that is going to prove on the nose and very interesting I imagine. He's of the McCoy era and possibly of a McCoy cut. Just what Owens needs - a McCoy berating his war time decisions!
And then there's Donner's commentary on Star. How on the nose is that? Probably a fair and accurate enough assessment. However, she doesn't have Owens knowledge of how Star handled matters in the last mission - though perhaps not knowing some of the details helps. Regardless, Star has shown she has potential. However, she's got a lot of people who don't rate or trust her. In the end, Donners is right about Owens not trusting and yet needing to trust Star. After all, if something happened Owens, then it would be Star who has command of his crew and ship. If he can't trust her implicitly, then maybe she shouldn't be there.
Date: 16 Nov 2013 16:52 Title: Day One: Farewell, My Lovely: III
I really liked this chapter. The dinner farewell was well-done, the right amount of surprise and tears mixed in with lightheartedness. I liked the new doctor -- eccentric old men make me happy on the inside. It's totally what I want to be when I grow up, lol. As to Owens and Donner, things are kinda complicated between them but there look to be some sparks there. Building for the future perhaps? More to look forward to there I'm sure. The curveball was indeed that, a real curveball, but Donner took it in stride (which leads me to believe she and he are totally meant for one another. Starting up the bandwagon now).
The mission seems pretty cut and dry, but I have no doubt things are bound to get worse before they get better. Looking forward to more.
Author's Response: Awesome, thanks for the feedback. Katanga will hopefully infuse quite a bit of eccentricity into this tale. And yeah, the Donners/Owens relationship is certainly complicated. Or at least, it is for Michael. If you are ever curious to learn more about Amaya Donners and the Agamemnon, look for The God Particle, a feature-length novel starring Donners on her first week on the job as captain of the Agamemnon. And hey, thanks for reading.