Date: 08 Nov 2014 04:31 Title: Chapter Two
Another round of introductions to some rather interesting characters. I love the idea behind the prototype cloaking device - seems like the technology to change the sensor signature would be less involved than that designed to hide an entire ship, although I do wonder if that would be entirely effective in all sitations. Seems to me there are places that 'foreign,' or even 'friendly' vessels just shouldn't be, regardless of whether or not they are considered a threat.
Some good interplay regarding the dynamics between the characters here, too. Already speculating as to who will have a problem with Tei, and who won't.
Date: 08 Nov 2014 02:40 Title: Chapter Two
Oooh, this is an interesting mission for them to be partaking in. And man... "Piggy" sure seems to be green around the gills (and possibly in possession of a Romulan fetish). I have a sneaking suspicion that one or both of those traits will lead to awkwardness at minimum-- if not outright catastrophe-- during this mission.
Date: 02 Sep 2012 10:06 Title: Chapter Two
This new clocking device sounds interesting but I'm sure I've come across the holographic concept before somewhere. May not have been in Trek canon, I don't remember.
Leone comes across as very cold and abrupt here. I'm not sure if that is her normal admiral command mode or if perhaps she is overcompensating for her emotional outbreak earlier.
I like the addition of Schweinfurt to the crew. His nickname and his unreciprocated romantic feelings towards Tei add some of your trademark comedic elements to this otherwise quite serious tale.