Date: 04 Jun 2013 22:16 Title: Chapter 12
Is it me, or are temporal agents kind of brazen? And maybe a little arrogant? They're likeable on a human level -- except Rick, he can go screw himself -- but they seem to set themselves up for a bruising.
Author's Response:
I think you would have to be. You'd have to be willing to go out there, again and again, to see a lot of destruction and a lot of meanness. Even peaceful times would be difficult, as you'd see people suffering from preventable, curable diseases, or living what, to you, might seem like meaningless lives.
Date: 02 Jun 2013 06:58 Title: Chapter 12
Well, things shift back to the Mirror where the ladies have managed to sneak their way (and by sneak, I mean ask Mister Spock really nicely) to the transporter room to observe Prime Kirk and co. beam over. Poor Kyle though, he got nailed with the agonizer, but the girls are there to help him out. I love how you manage to capture Kyle’s nice an genial nature here, as well as allow him to continue to say that nonsense about how seeing a doctor was a sign of weakness. I hate doctors too, Kyle, but when you’re in a bad way you need to get help.
Bernstein using the “I have a headache” gag to get out of the party was brilliant and I love the fact she got out of the party only to be approached to do some LSD (or LDS as Admiral Kirk calls it). She gets away, beams up, calls it a night.
But Rick has no such aspirations. His night was going to be a long and fun one as Windy was taking him for quite a ride. He was breathless, a bit surprised at how aggressive she was, and the two obviously enjoyed one another but I worry for his health from an emotional standpoint.
Author's Response:
A little sugar got the ladies where they needed to go, and Spock isn't as concerned with eying them or pushing for sex, so he allows their 'research'. And Kyle, of course, parrots one of the Five Signs of Weakness and rejects the idea of a doctor.
Rick, of course, will have to leave Windy. She's fun, but there are consequences.
As for Colonel Green's speech, much of it is lifted from canon quotes from him.
Date: 30 May 2013 13:26 Title: Chapter 12
Unless Rick looks full human on the outside, wouldn't Windy notice anything amiss?
Also I like how you are focusing on all three temporal training missions simultaneously. In particular I think the most gripping one is the one in which Tom and Kevin are participating in.