Date: 04 Jun 2013 21:01 Title: Chapter 5
Wow, those dreams were disturbing. But the earlier parts were fascinating. You almost have to wonder if the rise of the Temporal Integrity Commission was its own self-defeating cycle with the Manifesto -- it it's a sort of ouroborus situation there. One gives rise to the other.
Author's Response:
I think in some ways one can't exist without the other. The TIC is disturbing, and it should be. You should be really messed up working there, letting people die all the time.
Date: 02 Jun 2013 05:47 Title: Chapter 5
Well, it seems Otra and Levi might have a thing going on here. I’m not sure, but Levi tends to do things for Otra with one asking than he does for others in multiple askings, so I feel confident in starting up my shipping bandwagon on those two. They both seem to have some feelings for one another (at least Levi has for her, that arm touch sure sent shockwaves through his system). I feel bad for Rick watching that happen before his eyes though. Mr. Heartbreak really has had it bad with women in the past, and watching coworkers be able to find meaning with one another while he has no meaning … it has to be tough.
The surgical procedures were very detailed and well written in that they explained to me what was going on. I was wondering how all that stuff fit in there and though I’m not squeamish by any means, hearing about all the cutting and slicing and implanting … yesh, this is why I’m not a doctor. I don’t like hearing about that. I can visualize it all too well and though I did that here, it was necessary to get the point I across. It takes skill to do that in writing, to communicate an idea like that without resorting to broad strokes. I like details. Even if they make me kinda ill, lol.
Author's Response:
Ah, thank you. I think.
I confess I'm squeamish, too, but I wanted to get across the attention being paid.
Have you been following the music? Venus = Marisol. But no more hint dropping!
Date: 30 May 2013 12:11 Title: Chapter 5
I find it fascinating that Sheilagh and Tom can dream so soundly as Boris performs all of this brain surgery and adding implants to their brains. You would think -- as a sub-conscious defence mechanism -- that Sheilagh and Tom would have rather disturbed dreams?