Date: 03 Aug 2013 22:31 Title: Chapter 1
Well that was a enjoyable novel, your conversation lead style worked, as did using bold for mirror universe events, and italics for the shared dream state.
The aliens plan and the slight difference from grabbing a different person were well done, as was the two Polemina attempt to capture Doug dream state and use him to give them power over the quadrant.
you deliver the chapter cliffhangers well and I stay hook till from start to the end.
Author's Response:
Oh, thank you so much! You're very kind. This was my first real big serious novel. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Date: 02 Dec 2011 05:39 Title: Chapter 1
I smell trouble. A glitch? The same glitch? Here and there?
Some can only dream, some have the real thing ;)
Let's see where this is all going...
Author's Response:
One thing I want to point out here is Lili's isolation. Jenny is someone who she does not socialize with. She (Lili) barely talks to anyone, unless she's explaining what she's serving, or asking someone if they want more coffee. She starts off as a complete and utter drudge.
[Report This]Date: 22 Jul 2011 22:04 Title: Chapter 1
Just read chapter nine, i like where its going. I hope Doug and Lily ......hmm dont want to spoil it. All Ill say is the USS Defiant successfully crossed over and remained.
Author's Response:
Oh, I'm glad! :)
They are getting there.
[Report This]Date: 20 Jul 2011 19:37 Title: Chapter 1
I enjoyed the premise of the story, it was very much a trek feeling situation. The writing style took me a little to get used to, I understand it was like an episode in how the narrative jumped around. The font change helped but I still found it difficult to follow. I hope this input helps.I dont mean to sound harsh, only to be honest. Thank you for the story.
Author's Response:
I appreciate it. I had originally done it with color but that got kind of messy. There's more -- we're just getting started! :)