Date: 15 May 2013 17:48 Title: Chapter 22
Whoa, Keene. Okay, first off, you write Klingon very well. I enjoyed Keene's thoughts on everything that was going on. He seemed to convince Malok that his place was in sickbay but then ... well, Malok shows up with a phaser eliciting a WTF from Keene as well as me. What tipped Malok off? Has he known the entire time?
Then we get back to Prin and the battle, which increasingly looks like is not going to end well for those helping the Redemption. The deaths of the living ships was well portrayed ... Prin's thoughts are good ones. How can the Federation allow with people who willingly throw such creatures into violent engagements? But it's not like the Federation is that much better.
Well done. Keene was the highlight of the chapter for me and I kinda want him to narrate my life, just to hear how boring and pathetic it is and how he would totally own everyone with his Klingon-ness.