Date: 26 Nov 2009 10:09 Title: Opening Move
I’d forgotten how much I enjoyed the narrative of these Tain-centric stories. The man’s observations about the world around him, and the murky world of interstellar espionage that he inhabits never cease to entertain.
As for the ending… ow… it appears someone wants Tain incapacitated for some reason.
Author's Response: They may have wanted a little more than incapacitated. hehe Fortunately for him, he's TOUGHtm. :D
Date: 13 Oct 2009 21:36 Title: Opening Move
A really warm and fantastic opening to this tale. Somewhat in stark contrast to where the chapter goes, as Tain undertakes his commute to work we begin to descend [almost literally] into a darker more secretive world from the one of domestic 'almost bliss'. A great conceit and style to use evoking the characters and different sides adopted by Tain in his life. Even the way you describe his commute - initially projecting a powerful and awesome presence, intimidating to passer bys and almsot sizing uo to others; then becoming anonomous and introspective. Really an amazing piece of storytelling in the simplicity of it and yet in the detail and descriptive language.
After from all of that, I'm loving the little introduction to Sleg and his playful nature and the fondness with which Tain treats Sleg but also the remove and game that is played in regard to it all.
I also liked seeing just how the assassination attempt has changed Tain - from adapting a different mode of travel each day to the security measures invoked at HQ and especially the physical changes rendered to Tain - the bulk he cannot lose and the sweating and change of his metabolism. It shows that their were significant ramifications from Tain's night of long knives at the end of book 1.
Of course, then there's what is a possibly spectacular ending to this blinder of an opener and the fact that there may now be pay back for that night of long knives. Really PSGarak, just all sorts of awesome.
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm starting to get a firmer picture of setting with all of this. It's fleshing out in my head. Tain's avoidance of routine is a natural progression of the care he needs to take as he rises in the ranks of the Order.
Sleg is a lot of fun, but every time I write about him, it feels a little sad. Knowing what he eventually becomes makes seeing the innocent portion of his childhood bittersweet. Still, nobody starts out life like Elim Garak, thank goodness!
I always had a hard time accepting that somebody like Tain would allow himself to get really overweight, even in his advanced age. He seemed too disciplined and attentive to detail, but there are lots of reasons people struggle with weight. I decided making it a medical reason and a side effect of a past exploit made a lot of sense.
Few deeds such as that purge go unanswered on Cardassia. The game has just begun. :D Thanks for the thorough review!
Date: 01 Oct 2009 17:28 Title: Opening Move
Uh oh. That doesn't sound good for Tain.
Nice opening chapter, very descriptive and evocative. Can't wait to find out exactly what just happened.
Author's Response: He wakes up to find out it was only a dream. Kidding! Kidding!!