Date: 01 Jul 2013 00:49 Title: Chapter 20
Icheb was an adult. Surely he could see to his own health needs.
Ha! Yeah, no. But kudos on Adele for not being overbearing. I'm totally with her on the whole children-on-starships business, too; yeah, it makes for a lonely life for officers, but it's tactically stupid on so many levels. I never got why TNG did that. It's institutionalized insanity.
I already like Keller, though, and I so sincerely hope nothing horrific befalls that family. But it almost has to, now that they've been introduced.
Date: 18 Oct 2009 03:56 Title: Chapter 20
Well...seems as though things are setting up for a farily important first contact. Wonder how it's going to go down, and what the devil is up with that subspace? Nice work.
Date: 05 Sep 2009 10:24 Title: Chapter 20
A little different to what I reviewed over on TrekBBS because I wanted to query without spoiling things - Ok first up, I'm wondering about the throw away line about the flu. In conjunction with the gel packs getting sick unaccountably early on in the story. I wonder is there a connection or is the Admiral just making me paranoid.
Neat chapter with the command relationship between Adele and Icheb developing nicely, with Adele willing to trust the Commander despite her reservations and the stark reminders about his Borg heritage not to mention the reasons outlined by CeJay.
Yes there are certain similarities with Janeway but stark differences too and it is around how she interacts with people that the difference is most glaring. Of course such an approach could cause difficulties and quandaries for Adele down the line - especially in light of the young families onboard not to mention whatever new families might start along the seven years.
The decisions made by Adele are telling of her personality, her growing trust in Icheb and her concerns regards the Advisory Board. She nicely accepts Icheb's thoughts about taking the Sol, she opts to leave without telling the Board - and she's just right in her assessment to that. Hopefully it is a little one up on them and puts some in their box - though it will be interesting to see how Icheb fares in the next meeting when he debriefs them to the captain's absence.
Now I have to add an ominious little wondering about the impressive shield technology of this race. If the Sol can't get through without their assistance how will they ever leave if things go south? Hmmm ... lots of little things here and there to mull over.
And of course, great character interactions. I liked in particular Adele's conscious move to try to converse and know some of her crew more on the bridge of the Sol.
That and it also occurs to me that with a seven year mission the scope of the mission and story grows bigger by the chapter in terms of ramifications and thought processes it triggers in my mind. I'm left wondering at the moment how much of that seven years are you going to write for!? Ha! Good stuff anyway, kes7.
Author's Response:
Sometimes a throw away line is just that. (And sometimes it's not.) I will say the gel packs get their day in the sun in the next chapter. The flu may not factor in, but Icheb is going to have to make his first tricky command decision in Adele's absence.
Gee, everyone is so suspicious of the Tyndorans! Where's your Federation Starfleet sense of openness to new cultures?
I'm glad you like the development of Adele's personality and her relationship with her second-in-command. I think her trusting of Icheb at this point is like when you're a kid on the high dive, and you're pretty scared, but at some point you just have to jump in with both feet. She still has major misgivings, but without anything concrete to base them on, she's just going to have to trust that her superiors at Starfleet knew what they were doing when they assigned him as her XO. She's not completely skeptical anymore, though -- since they've gotten to talk more over the past few chapters, she's starting to like him, or at least get used to him. So far, she thinks he's competent, scary intelligent and really, really young.
This story IS huge. I'm thinking it will be broken up into a few different "books" for a series. If people keep liking it, I'd love to follow them for seven years. But this story is the trip to the DQ, what they find when they get there, and their handling of that situation.
Date: 03 Sep 2009 06:38 Title: Chapter 20
Adele is handling Icheb well, and her time away from Tesseract will give him the opportunity both to stretch his command legs as well as give the captain a chance to guage his abilities. I'll be interested to see the advisory council's reactions when they discover Adele has jumped ship without informing them in advance.
And at least she took his advice on taking the Sol rather than a runabout.
Author's Response:
Yes, this will be a nice little pop quiz for Icheb. Is he ready? Let's find out. Thanks for the comment!
Date: 03 Sep 2009 04:14 Title: Chapter 20
It's good to see that she and Icheb are getting a little more used to each other, if not exactly comfortable. His comment about bonding time made me laugh aloud. I'm curious to see how he fares with the advisory committee with Adelle gone. Should be some interesting times. A very solid chapter!
Author's Response:
I'm sure Icheb is grateful someone gets his sense of humor. And "getting used to each other" is a good way to describe the developing relationship between Adele and her XO. They're not best buddies -- Adele has a lot of reservations, and Icheb's not so interpersonally clueless that he doesn't realize that -- but they're making the best of the situation and they're both trying.