Date: 24 May 2016 19:18 Title: Chapter 3
Love seeing JQ for the first time here. Chipper and good-natured as always, he provides a much needed since of grounding. Whereas there's clearly a secret being kept from him (and between Maren and Icheb), you can see how much it grates on her not to tell him.
And yet, whatever the secret is, it clearly isn't enough to NOT convince her to talk to Icheb as she finds him waiting outside her quarters. Whatever was there is still there.
Date: 30 Jun 2013 03:29 Title: Chapter 3
This is a particularly masterful line on John's part: “You know you’re going to have to talk to him, Maren. The both of you can’t spend the next seven years pretending the last seven didn’t happen.” The phrasing takes it from a mundane statement to something approaching elegance.
I don't actually know why Icheb and Maren fell out, exactly, but it seems I'm going to. I can't imagine that she didn't have a jolt of shock and dismay at seeing him standing there, but brave enough to go in and talk to him anyway.
Date: 08 Apr 2012 00:02 Title: Chapter 3
So the Icheb/Maren backstory is being fleshed out, I am very intrigued by those two. I have to say normally most Star Trek stories stumble around in the first few chapters introducing the main characters, however with your story it is totally the opposite. You've cleverly gotten over the whole coolness of the Tesseract ship, and your Trekkie reader doesn't really see your stereotypical starship but something else. What that something is lies in the writing, but it tells me you have created something unique. Very intriguing method and what a way to start off a story...
Author's Response: It's good that you find them intriguing, because they'll be around a lot. :) Thank you for the kind words!
Date: 25 Oct 2009 22:20 Title: Chapter 3
A dark secret to boot! Good thing I'm eating popcorn. Again, a strong entry.