Date: 29 Oct 2013 00:37 Title: Chapter 4
Well we get to meet Nick and see why Hank want him as his X/O hardworking but prepare to give the Hank the honest truth about the crew and Hank himself.
Still you do a good job of rounding out the crew and showing the friendship that links the two men. As Hank has realize he does seem to have a odd crew collection all of them. Still good of Nick to point out there are all good people in need of a second chance, a bit like the ambassador class itself.
Still I wonder what Nick forgot to tell Hank.
Date: 28 May 2013 01:52 Title: Chapter 4
An interesting scene weighing out the pros and cons of Hank being a captain of... What is this vessel called again? Maybe I missed it but is it called the Pearl?
Date: 23 Apr 2009 22:04 Title: Chapter 4
Terrific insight to Hank. Is he really ready and fit for the job. When your own mate and XO can't say yes straight out you have to start worrying. Class dialogue and an interesting partnership already exists and continues to build between the commanding officers. A crew needs their leadership to be be able to work together. Mind it also needs an XO who can trust their captain is up to the mark and Nick doesn't exactly inspire on that score.
And when you think about it Kirk does have a lot to be blamed for. Talk about trying to live up to a memory. Neat to hear a character vocalise it so well in the 24thC
P.S. sorry it has taken me so long to post these reviews.
Date: 01 Apr 2009 16:44 Title: Chapter 4
The camaraderie between Hank and Nick is really well handled. The dialogue there seems both real and natural, something that can make or break a story. I got a kick out of them kind of spelling out Bearrian's name -- how often do you see authors who actually pay attention to such human subtleties like that? But the whole conversation was just good... they seriously did seem like they'd been friends for a long time, even if we've only just met them ourselves.
I also like that these people are kind of a crew of independent thinkers, especially since they're NOT exactly the cream of the crop. While I love the famous Enterprises, I really love underdogs, too.
Date: 20 Feb 2009 23:50 Title: Chapter 4
This is really establishing some ground rules. First of all, we get to see Hank a little closer and more defined. He has a strange record, he has some issues. So does everyone around him. You can tell already that these people, all of them, need each other because they all have some demons to exorcise. Then, there's an established to a degree at least captain/XO rapport. I loved the friendship note, I missed it in TNG.
There's also a great tribute to your writing that the dialogues sound so natural. What's more, I can hear different characters speaking, with their respective features and attitudes coming through. It's amazing, and it makes the tale so much more enchanting. I mean no one has even opened fire yet, and I can see this family of crew already. Nicely done.
And just how does one misspell Klingon?;-)
Author's Response:
Klingon...ah...well...umm....
Too much Blood wine that night I guess :)